User talk:Haleycrews/sandbox

Team 2 Review

1. One thing that this article does well is divide the information and have a good amount of information underneath those subtitles. The structure of the article is well thought out and flows well between sections. Another thing that this article does well is cite sources appropriately.

2. Something that could be changed is under Mental Stress (stats), there are blank spaces where some data or information is missing.

3. Another thing that could help is adding a picture or chart to the article to help make it more visually appealing, and make people more interested and catch attention toward article.

4. This article does relate to our article of Alliance, Ohio. In our article we have a diseases of poverty section that heavily relates to this article.

Team 5 Review

"Follow their lead" 1. The lead is informative and clear about the problem "A clear structure" 1. It seems organized in a sensible way "A balancing act" 1. The length of "lack of access to exercise" is a little too long. Maybe shorten up it up a little bit by only hitting on the more important aspects of that topic 2. looks great 3. no "Neutral content" 1. content looks neutral "reliable sources" 1. sources looks good. there are a couple references (5 & 12) that have a "check url" statement next to it. Try incorporate the textbook from class. "Share the love" 1. Article was kept neutral, had ample amount of information in each section 2. maybe shorten the topic "lack of access to exercise". maybe hit the more important topics to help shorten it. make sure when writing sources, you add period then sources 3. shorten the "lack of access to exercise" topic 4. the section on "inadequate education" could be helpful to our wiki article. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Blankebl2019 (talk • contribs) 19:16, 2 April 2019 (UTC)