User talk:Hannahmariemar/sandbox

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This article is very organized because it starts of by introducing who she is and basically summarizes her life in the first topic. The Second topic introduces her background and what she faced while growing up. A couple things I would suggest is that you talk less about her family members and talk more about her in the second paragraph of topic “Family Life.” You should talk more about how the way she grew up affect the type of work she wrote about. Something else I would also suggest is that you be more specific when introducing a new character and talk more about why what they do is so important. For example, you talked about her brother and younger sister. You stated that Carroll was a great lawyer and Benjamin was an attorney General. Just a suggestion, you can say that the fact that he studied law was the reason why Benjamin was able to win the case against her. The last topic talks about her work but not what she has accomplished over her years that pertains to what she is known about and that is being a feminist. You should go into depth more about what her articles talk about to get your readers to understand why she is so important and should be acknowledged. Maybe a good idea would be to search an article or poem she has written and talk about it. It could definitely be used as another resource for this page.BrightStar20 (talk) 13:30, 17 March 2016 (UTC)