User talk:Harborporpoise/sandbox

Experiment

I'm just playing with using a talk page and citing sources before making changes to the talk page of the article I'm working on.

Clark, A. Hamilton. (1911). The clipper ship era: an epitome of famous American and British clipper ships, their owners, builders, commanders, and crews, 1843-1869. New York: G.P. Putnam's sons. Pages 306-307, 395.

Cole, W. E. (1943). Standing up to life. Boston: The Beacon press. Pages 29-32.

State Street Trust Company (Boston, M. (1919). Other merchants and sea captains of old Boston: being more information about the merchants and sea captains of old Boston who played such an important part in building up the commerce of New England, together with some quaint and curious stories of the sea. Boston: State Street Trust Co.. Page 47.

This is an experiment to get a better sense of citing within a talk page Harborporpoise (talk) 02:25, 11 October 2017 (UTC)

Peer Feedback

1. Holy moly this was super interesting, it truly read like a story! 2. I think it was great how you explained a lot of the boat jargon, because I as someone not very familiar with sea vessels was able to understand it. 3. I see your first source is from a Museum, maybe you could incorporate a 'Legacy' section that includes the last paragraph you had about the book and hospital as well as any other museums/articles she inspired in case people want the find out more about her 4. I'm not sure if you plan on putting in subheadings, but it could a bit more tricky since your article reads more like a cohesive story. Maybe you could do like early life, first voyages, female captain, later life or something? 5. Also, I think the most helpful thing would be to include pictures if at all possible. Either a picture of her, or the type of boat she sailed on because it's hard for me to picture what it might have looked like. Great job! Aq0sw9de8fr7 (talk) 19:59, 10 November 2017 (UTC)

Review--Pearson

This is a huge contribution/expansion of Mary Patten's entry. You've added a ton of helpful detail about her and the journey (love that you used Ancestry!). I agree with Hadley that this reads a cohesive story and it's hard to know if sub-heads would work or be helpful. But you should and can differentiate the lead from the body at the very least.

I'd like to see you add a citation for the claim about how she learned navigation from her husband. You could also disambiguate the "he" in the sentence about the first mate likely having a bet on a competing boat. There are a couple other proofreading errors to fix, but you will probably catch them if you make another careful pass through. Very nice work. Shoopee (talk) 03:46, 12 November 2017 (UTC)