User talk:Hasa20171/sandbox

Peer Review by AnuYo

Hi Hasa20171,

The draft of your article is looking great so far! It looks like you have got down a lot of the major points related to your fungus. In my comments below, you'll see a source you can use to get a few more details into some of your sections.

General:

• The first time your fungus is mentioned, you have to spell out the name in its entirety (ie. Rhinocladiella mackenziei)
• You can abbreviate it after that (ie. R. mackenziei)
• Don’t forget to italicize the name of your fungus each time it is mentioned!

History:

• “Middle East” needs to be capitalized
• You have listed the “synonymy” and “classification” information in this section, but it seems redundant because it is already in the “Scientific classification” box

Growth and morphology:

• I think you'll be able to flesh this section out if you can add information about the growth rate of this fungus on different mediums, its shape, size, etc.

Physiology:

• The wording of your points (specifically, using the word “may”) makes it seem like this information is not completely reliable, even though you have cited it
• Try rewording these sentences so the information doesn’t come across as a possibility instead of facts

Habitat and ecology:

• I think you can move some of the information in this section into a “Diseases in humans” type section, as you have quite a bit of information on the infection itself
• You mentioned a few countries that this infection is found in --> what is it about these places that causes the fungus to grow there? Is it the climate or vegetation native to that area or something along those lines?
• You mentioned that the drug posaconazole is effective in vitro, then went on to explain conditions which make it more effective when taken orally --> is this a new drug that is just being tested, or has it been found to be successful?
• One thing I’m confused about is what the drug does. Is this drug only able to get rid of the fungal infection? Does it help to remedy cerebral phaeophyphomycosis? If it does cure cerebral phaeophyphomycosis, is the point that development of this usually results in fatality still true?

Overall, I think you've done a great job! I hope these notes might be helpful in some way. Good luck!

AnuYo (talk) 22:10, 28 October 2016 (UTC)

Comments from ADSky

Greetings Hasa20171, Your draft article looks like it is coming along well. There were many good points that provided enough information to get a general sense about Rhinocladiella mackenziei. Some ideas I had that could help your article are the following:

Formatting

-Make sure you use italics on all species name that you use, and shorten them, e.g. R. mackenziei, unless used at the start of the sentence

-Also, try to hyperlink to other page when using words that have their own topic, e.g Melanin, Phaeohyphomycosis

Content

-A lot of the information you have in the habitat and ecology would more fit in a section called "Disease" or something similar in idea

-To fill up the habitat and ecology section, you could write about places where cases of R. mackenziei was found, and even rename the section epidemiology

-I noticed that you mentionedRamichloridium mackenziei as a synonym, perhaps if you can find information on it why there was a name change, you could include it

Finally, I also found a paper that seems to have a good amount of information about the disease causing factors and epidemiology of your fungus, if it helps, feel free to use it: In closing, keep up the good work!

Peer Review

Hi Hasa20171,

Here are some suggestions I have after reading your fungal entry. It seems you have forgotten to italicize your fungus name each time you mention it - please don't forget to do this (for both the full name, and abbreviations).

History

• It may be helpful to list years for the various events that you have listed
• Perhaps explain why it was originally classified in the genus Ramichloridium, then later moved to Rhinocladiella in 2007

Taxonomy

• The information in this subheading is quite confusing. In your final draft, your second and third point could be combined since you are talking about the same thing (its close resemblance to another species)
• Also, the second last point regarding its classification seems to be unnecessary since it is already listed in the taxobox. However, if you would like to keep it, then it may be better to summarize this information at the beginning

Growth and morphology

• It may be helpful to readers to link certain terms such as septate, hypha, conidia, etc.

Physiology

• I would suggest further explaining how pigment can help fungus attack immune system. This seems interesting, and it would be nice to understand the process and technique behind this

Habitat and ecology

• The word "posaconazole" can be linked

Em.elle (talk) 03:55, 29 October 2016 (UTC)