User talk:Inkian Jason/Realtor.com

Reviewer comments

Serving up an observation. I dislike the use of the image of Elizabeth Banks in the proposed article. Firstly, it appears in her article and nine others on English Wikipedia. One can link through your wikilink and surely see her. Secondly, of course, it adds blatant name-dropping promotion. (A glamour shot for a red carpet appearance, not even for this company...) If desired (or not) surely one for your company. Thank you. Fylbecatulous talk 15:19, 22 October 2017 (UTC)

@Fylbecatulous: No problem, I understand. Feel free to remove the image, or just not copy over. Inkian Jason (talk) 15:05, 23 October 2017 (UTC)

@Fylbecatulous: I went ahead and removed the image from the section. Thanks again for taking a look! Inkian Jason (talk) 16:03, 27 October 2017 (UTC)

Infobox readability

See template- and parseability-related comments at User talk:Inkian Jason/Move (company); they apply here, too.  — SMcCandlish ☏ ¢ >^ʌⱷ҅_ᴥⱷ^ʌ<  12:21, 8 November 2017 (UTC)

Clarification

Change Realtor.com (stylized as realtor.com) to Realtor.com (stylized all-lowercase, as realtor.com) or it looks like some kind of error to the average reader. "Realtor.com" would be capitalized at the start of a sentence no matter what, so it's unclear what the difference is supposed to be unless it's spelled out.  — SMcCandlish ☏ ¢ >^ʌⱷ҅_ᴥⱷ^ʌ<  12:26, 8 November 2017 (UTC)

Over-capitalization

Lowercase the job titles in the infobox in this and the other draft, per MOS:JOBTITLES; they're only capped when attached before a name, e.g. "according to Chief Executive Officer Foo B. Bazzquux"). This will also greatly improve the readability of that dense list of names and titles, by better distinguishing the former from the latter.  — SMcCandlish ☏ ¢ >^ʌⱷ҅_ᴥⱷ^ʌ<  12:29, 8 November 2017 (UTC)

Brevity, and "annoucements"

Avoid blathery wording like "announced plans to provide" (use "started providing" or something else shorter). I see "announced" at least 3 times in this piece, but an announcement of something, in and of itself, is unencyclopedic trivia (WP:NOT#INDISCRIMINATE), unless the very announcement was controversial or noteworthy (generated independent reliable coverage as an announcement, rather than coverage of the facts being announced). Announcements of something forthcoming are generally not included at all, per WP:NOT#CRYSTAL, though there are sometimes exceptions in business, e.g. announcement of a forthcoming merger that attracts pre-merger in-depth coverage because of its economic or other implications.  — SMcCandlish ☏ ¢ >^ʌⱷ҅_ᴥⱷ^ʌ<  12:34, 8 November 2017 (UTC)