User talk:IsaMMontes/sandbox

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Alfgarciamora in topic Week 8

Prof Garcia's Comments

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Week 2

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You're really doing a great job here, Isabella. Your comments on the Lameth page were appropriate and useful. Your answers on the content gap were clear and thorough. Please keep up the great work for all future assignments. Alfgarciamora (talk) 20:20, 30 January 2017 (UTC)Reply

Peer Review

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Hi Isabella, great job outlining your plans for your article; I can see that you have put a lot of thought in your ideas so far. Also, amazing job taking charge in changing your article. Kudos on being the only person to write anything on your character's talk page, I know that it can be hard sometimes to start editing without any guidance. As for improvements, you've already done a great job in fixing grammatical mistakes and creating a list an amazing list of possible sources. The only thing that I would recommend doing is making your draft resemble what you want the final article to look like. You can do this by adding a few more details to the outline that you already have and making the language sound more encyclopedic. Remember that the draft in your sandbox should be almost ready to be put out into the main-space. You have absolutely amazing ideas so far, all you have to do is develop them and you will have a great article on your hands. -Revolutionary27 (talk) 04:25, 27 February 2017 (UTC)Reply

Hi Isabella, thank you so much for your thorough and kind review. I will start to mend my draft so it will better resemble my final article. Your review and your sandbox page have given me a couple of ideas for how to structure and implement the information into my article. I will be sure to keep the language in mind while writing it. Thank you again for your helpful insight!@Revolutionary27: 

--IsaMMontes (talk) 02:45, 6 March 2017 (UTC)Reply

Week 8

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You've done a really nice job, IsaMMontes! =) Well done posting on the article's talk page, nice additions to your mainspace, and great job keeping organized. In the next few weeks, just finish up with additional details, citations, quotations, etc that you might be able to add. One suggestion I might have is to ask somebody else in the class to read your article and see if they see any "gaps" in the mainspace. That might help you focus on certain sections of your page to finish up. I am very impressed with your work overall, however, and I commend you for a job well done. Alfgarciamora (talk) 15:42, 20 March 2017 (UTC)Reply