John sheens
March 2016
editHello, I'm Dcirovic. I wanted to let you know that one or more of your recent contributions to Voxel has been undone because it did not appear constructive. If you would like to experiment, please use the sandbox. If you think I made a mistake, or if you have any questions, you can leave me a message on my talk page. Dcirovic (talk) 01:23, 14 March 2016 (UTC)
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editI thought I was in sandpit! I am just beginning John sheens (talk) 01:47, 14 March 2016 (UTC)
Edits to Mistletoebird
editHi @John sheens: - I'm taking this to your talk page so we can keep it centralized.
My concerns with the edits I reverted are as follows:
- This is an article about a species, NOT an essay that should wander into diversions, explanations of side-topics etc. Recall that this is an encyclopedia; as you would expect in such a work, if there is something of incidental importance that bears on the current subject, you wikilink to the treatment of that topic elsewhere on WP, and if that's not available, keep the incidental info as short as possible. As such, there should not be an entire subsection 'The Mistletoe' in this article.
- WP requires the use of neutral and detached language. Please avoid describing something as a 'blight' unless it actually is one (and you even linked to blight, which describes something quite different from what you meant); don't call a suitable nesting site a 'haven'; and things in this vein.
- Please make sure to keep within the form used in other species articles. You will not find headlines reading 'Generally' anywhere; if something is of general relevance to a section, just put it first in the section, then group specific stuff under subheadings (i.e., just as 'Taxonomy' is organized now).
- Please don't leave unfinished sentences sitting in an article when you commit an edit. When the next editor comes along, they will see this as a mistake or vandalism, and revert it. Try to commit only chunks that are somewhat finished in themselves (paragraphs or the like) to avoid this. If you know you will be editing constantly for some time, you can place the Under Construction template at the top of the article to inform people that things may look unsettled for a bit. Please make sure to remove this whenever you stop editing for more than an hour or so, though.
I had the impression that you were heading off into a writing style that would be a major hassle to clean up at some point (and someone WILL have to clean it up). I hope you'll be willing to do it right the first time though :) Thanks for using good citation style, and the image certainly is fine.
You should of course feel free to revert my edit and work from the material you already added. Cheers -- Elmidae (talk) 11:22, 17 March 2016 (UTC)
- Thanks Elmidae. Your words were generally helpful and my expressions could be improved. I should complete my works in Word and have them transferred to Wiki in one go. The mistletoe is so central to the mistletoe bird that I saw it as a subheading in behavior - A bit like icebergs to penguins. All the best, JS
- Hi John. I share some of Elmidae's concerns. But I think you're headed in the right direction. I reverted your edit so that I could clean it up a bit. I did think your picture was a far better choice for the article, and I tightened up your discussion of the mistletoe bush, so as to keep the parts which are relevant to it being the habitat of the bird, which is germane to the article's subject. The discussion of the farming stuff didn't really belong in an article about a bird which makes the bush its home. However, that being said, you might want to add it to the Mistletoe article, under the section "Ecological importance", where it would make a nifty little addition. Also, be aware of the concern of the tone of your writing. An encyclopedia consists of dry, factual articles, without commentary or conclusions.Onel5969 TT me 12:06, 17 March 2016 (UTC)
- Thanks, lads....food for thought John sheens (talk) 21:58, 17 March 2016 (UTC)
- Hi John. I share some of Elmidae's concerns. But I think you're headed in the right direction. I reverted your edit so that I could clean it up a bit. I did think your picture was a far better choice for the article, and I tightened up your discussion of the mistletoe bush, so as to keep the parts which are relevant to it being the habitat of the bird, which is germane to the article's subject. The discussion of the farming stuff didn't really belong in an article about a bird which makes the bush its home. However, that being said, you might want to add it to the Mistletoe article, under the section "Ecological importance", where it would make a nifty little addition. Also, be aware of the concern of the tone of your writing. An encyclopedia consists of dry, factual articles, without commentary or conclusions.Onel5969 TT me 12:06, 17 March 2016 (UTC)
- Thanks Elmidae. Your words were generally helpful and my expressions could be improved. I should complete my works in Word and have them transferred to Wiki in one go. The mistletoe is so central to the mistletoe bird that I saw it as a subheading in behavior - A bit like icebergs to penguins. All the best, JS
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- Thanks. Fixed, by linking it to 'birds'.John sheens (talk) 02:02, 1 April 2016 (UTC)