User talk:Jvichio/sandbox

Feedback

So far so good! The only critical feedback I can give you would be to refrain from saying "creepypasta.com and horrornovelreviews.com". Instead, just mention what the author said in an interview and cite the website after that. Wikipedia doesn't do in-text citations like we've done in the past. Also, maybe try to find more reviews about the book and how it was received. You wrote about it in a positive light, which is fine, but that could come across maybe as a little biased. Other than that, keep adding more to your draft. It's a great start! Soriaj295 (talk) 15:21, 27 April 2017 (UTC)

Peer Review - Lorina

Reception - "Great received by critics and fans" seems bias, cite a link to a critic or rating of the book. - Make sure you cite sources on the information you talk about - change "because" to "since" in the last sentence - Make the last sentence be known that the author said it, otherwise it sounds like a bias review.

Inspiration - change to " came from a childhood memory that Dathan explains as: ..."

- "He explains" is repeated a lot in this paragraph - Simply add at the end that the reception of Footsteps blew Dathan away and he was inspired to write a full novel for his fans. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Lorinangj (talk • contribs) 15:35, 27 April 2017 (UTC)