KRCPhilmon
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Karolina,
I noticed that your biography is on your user page. Do not forget to move it to your sandbox so that yours won't get deleted as mine did a few weeks ago. Just a friendly suggestion!
Being Digital Peer Review
editHey Karolina! So I know you're working the page Being Digital and seeing as the professor wanted us to do a peer review and post it to someone's talk page I figured I'd do it here (while addressing your whole group).
So here are some pros concerning the page:
1: The page has a strong opening that encapsulates the book as a whole. 2: The page presents a very nice general information about the text. 3: As far as I could tell there is very little in terms of grammatical errors and spelling errors and finally 4: All of the references for the page follow the standard for Wikipedia
Now there is one glaring error for the page as a whole and it mostly concerns the final paragraph and the last sentence of the opening. The page has a hard time keeping the information neutral, it likes to sing the praises of the author of the text and talks about things in context of amazement and wonder, while normally this would be ok but for a Wikipedia article it doesn't work. If you and your group could somehow fix the page to be just neutral from start to finish your page would be improved by an immense amount. Keep up the good work and I hope the page comes out well! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Metroidm (talk • contribs) 22:10, 22 February 2020 (UTC)
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editHello, KRCPhilmon, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:31, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
May 2020
editHello, I'm Materialscientist. I noticed that in this edit to Being Digital, you removed content without adequately explaining why. In the future, it would be helpful to others if you described your changes to Wikipedia with an edit summary. If this was a mistake, don't worry, the removed content has been restored. If you think I made a mistake, or if you have any questions, you can leave me a message on my talk page. Thank you. Materialscientist (talk) 01:22, 6 May 2020 (UTC)
Hi KRCPhilmon. If there was something you didn't understand about the edit I made here to Being Digital, I would've been more than happy to clarify. I did leave an edit summary with links to various Wikipedia guideline and MOS pages providing more information as to why I made some of those changes, but perhaps you didn't notice or didn't understand it. Your blanket revert here, however, was without an edit summary and reintroduce a bunch of syntax and pother MOS errors without any explanation or edit summary at all, which is not a very good idea. I can see that you're a student and perhaps you are working on some sort of deadline as well as not being very familiar with Wikipedia's various policies and guidelines. I also see that the Wiki-Ed advisor for your class is Shalor (Wiki Ed). Shalor is a good person to have as an advisor since she's quite knowledgeable about things Wikipedia and she also, by chance, is a fairly familiar with me as an editor; in other words, she might not only be able to help clarify why changed the things I did, but also probably understands that I wouldn't do such a thing unless I believe it was an actual improvement. I will ask her to take a look a things, but if you've got any specific questions about any of the changes I made, you can ask them at Talk:Being Digital.
One general comment is that in the "Analysis" section there seems to be an excessive amount of quoted text. While Wikipedia allows us to quote sources in article's per MOS:QUOTE, basically we as editors are encourage to summarize sources for the most part in our own words and keep quoted text as minimal as possible to avoid articles becoming things like WP:QUOTEFARM. I don't think things are that bad yet, but perhaps there's a way to either reduce or summarize the quoted text. Some other things to take a look at are MOS:LQ, MOS:SECTIONCAPS, WP:CS#Avoid embedded links, WP:MAJORWORKS, WP:PSEUDOHEAD, etc. since those were some other things I noticed and tried to correct. -- Marchjuly (talk) 06:13, 6 May 2020 (UTC)
- Thanks Marchjuly! KRCPhilmon, it's extremely important that you discuss any major edits on the article's talk page, particularly when they have been reverted or otherwise challenged.
- You also want to be a little careful about what you place on your userpage - this should really only cover you as it applies to your editing Wikipedia. The amount of content you have currently could be seen as the page being used as a social profile of sorts. It's also generally not good to have that much detail about yourself on the Internet, as there are some risks (like identity theft) that can come with having that much information so freely available. You can read over some of Wikipedia's cautions about this here, here, and here. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 13:41, 6 May 2020 (UTC)