User talk:Kaypri/sandbox
Is this where I write?
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editNo, I think this is where we comment!
I read the words you posted and I would recommend you to these three sources:
Loo, Tina (2007). "Disturbing the Peace: Environmental Change and the Scales of Justice on a Northern River". Environmental History 12 (4): 895-919. Loo, Tina (2004). "People in the Way: Modernity, Environment, and Society on the Arrow Lakes". BC Studies (142/143): 161-196. Stanley, Meg (2010). Voices from Two Rivers: Harnessing the Power of the Peace and Columbia. Vancouver: Douglas & McIntyre.
Alternatively, email Stephen or Tina the article you've found. Maybe even with an annotation, and ask if it can be used.
For the writing you have done, try to remain very neutral and avoid words such as positive and negative. Also, from what I understand all the information we give must be referenced, the first part of the paragraph looks good, but your last sentence isn't referenced. Although if you're going to expand on that information and reference it below, perhaps it doesn't have to be.
If after reading the relevant parts of the sources (particularly Stanley) talking about the upstream/downstream effects still doesn't make sense, please do change it to what you think will work best!
So far what you have written looks like a great introduction to your section.