User talk:Kim.glor/sandbox
Hi, I just finished reading through the info of your species. There are quite a lot of info added for your species. I like how you organized your data in the different subheadings. While reading through, I came up with some little suggestions that you may want to modify. First, for the section of “History and taxonomy”, if you can find some more info related to this section, it will be very helpful for the reader to better know your species. You could add the origin of the name and how it was discovered. For the section of “Growth and morphology”, you could add on how your species reproduces. Also, it’ll be great if you add another section mentioning some evidences or cases that apply to your species providing with preventions and treatments regarding of the fungi. Hope these will help you draft your final article! Good job!
Hey, I loved your points on your species, S. racemosum, and especially the part on pathogenicity, as this could be of great use in the medical field and really anyone who wants to learn more about the effects of this fungus. I believe that some components could be shifted around, as in meaning some points could fit better in other sections, such as the part on "common saprobe in soil, decaying vegetation and animal feces" in the "History and Taxonomy" section could be moved to the "Habitat and Ecology" section. Also, perhaps if there is a historical case of this species being mistaken for another, or studied incorrectly where the result was later concluded to belong in a different genus or species, including something like this may clear up confusions with the fungus. I want to recommend you this site https://www.emlab.com/app/fungi/Fungi.po?event=fungi&type=secondary&species=119&name=Syncephalastrum where it discusses general but perhaps important info on the species and under the reference sections I feel like there are many places you could access to get more information on your fungus. Check it out if you like :). I really like your part on the growth and morphology because this has a lot of detail and it would be very, very helpful in identification and studies for mycologists. Overall, I think this is shaping up to be really great and I am looking forward to what your final draft will look like! HenryJeon (talk) 14:40, 27 October 2017 (UTC)
Hi! I love how well organized your points are and your subheadings make it very useful for the reader to find exactly what they are looking for. I just have some minor suggestions to help improve the flow of your article. Firstly, I think you should add a short introduction to your fungus before diving into the history so it gives you the chance to intrigue the reader.
I also think you could move some points around, such as the "generally grow well on artificial media such as yeast extract agar, oatmeal agar[4], potato sucrose malt extract agar[7]" in Physiology could be moved to the Growth and Morphology section. This would help tie the sentences together as you are already talking about the growth of colonies and etc. in that section.
Also, in your Habitat and Ecology section, you stated that the fungus was allergenic , maybe you could expand on that and talk about what type of allergens and how the allergens can spread within an ecosystem. You also mentioned that it was rarely found to be pathogenic in humans, you could try to look into cases that might suggest that this fungus could perhaps be pathogenic in humans?
Hope this helps! Good luck! Akhalya.i (talk) 21:20, 27 October 2017 (UTC)
Hi there! Your article is looking good so far! Here are some suggestions:
For your "Physiology" section, maybe you could include the ideal growth medium for ideal culturing conditions (point 2).
I found your points in your "Potential usages" section to be very interesting! By the way, make sure you make the "U" in "Usages" in your heading lowercase (to follow the heading format)!
Page 165-166 of this book also talks about several cases where S. racemosum has been isolated in food. https://link.springer.com/content/pdf/10.1007%2F978-0-387-92207-2.pdf You may want to look into this and include them as examples in your "Habitat and ecology" section. You may also want to look into the role of S. racemosum in food spoilage.
I would like to suggest changing your heading title, "Pathogenicity" to "Associated pathologies" (or something along the lines of that), as "pathogenecity" relates more to the underlying mechanisms of the cause of disease by your fungus while the points you have are more related to the types of human diseases that your fungus causes. I noticed you mentioned onychomycosis in the Pathogenicity section. Here is a paper about a specific case of toenail onychomycosis caused by S. racemosum that you could use as an example to support your point about onychomycosis. https://escholarship.org/uc/item/794644t6 I also found a paper on a case of intraabdominal infection caused by your fungus that was successfully treated. https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC1287817/ While you have a variety of examples of pathologies caused by your fungus, I think it would be worthwhile to also talk about possible treatments for diseases caused by your fungus, as it plays such a contributing role to human disease. Within your "Pathogenecity" section, I think it would help improve the flow of your points if you put the points about diseases caused in organisms other than humans (ex. "leafcutter ants", "bovine mycotic abortion") close together, rather than embedding them in between points about human pathologies caused by your disease.
I hope this helps! Great job and Good Luck!!