Kochmd
Hi-
Hopefully this works, I'm not too good with Wikipedia. If you don't mind, just let me know that you received my message. I read over your article and did some background research myself and thought that you guys did a really nice job covering a topic that isn't too popular. Here are some suggestions, feel free but not obligated to use them.
In the National Institutes of Health 1966-1973 section: I really liked how you not only explained the techniques of scientific research but you also connected that to the impact and importance of the research. I suggest that if possible (I know the resources are scarce) try to do the same thing regarding the details/importance of the research in the University of Washington 1981-1990 section.
In the National Institute of Neurological Disorders and Stroke 1998-2001 section: I think it would be wise to expand the section "one of which being helping to shape national policy on important neurological research issues." I'm not too familiar with what this means exactly, but it seems like this would be an interesting topic to know a little more about. Does this have to do with ethics at all? On what people think is humane or inhumane testing on humans regarding neurological testing? Perhaps you could share the man's views on this topic? Just a suggestion.
Also-for the Columbia University section: Think about expanding the section when you say the research stemmed off of his previous research. Did he conduct the same experiments or the same topics studied?
Finally, is there any way to incorporate where his research has led to? What I mean by this is: has anybody picked up where he left off? Has his research served as motivation for current research?
I thought your Autism section was really good. It seems like this guy is pretty influential in science and it's nice that he's trying to figure out autism. The section was well written.
Overall, I thought your article was awesome! Sorry for criticizing and sounding harsh...just have to comply to the rules of the assignment. Feel free to critique my article, Rostral Migratory Stream. I'd like to hear your comments! Also, once again, please just let me know if you get this. Thanks again and good job!
-Alexandra Kennedy
Pretkennedy (talk) 03:55, 9 November 2011 (UTC)pretkennedy
Thanks Alexandra for your comments! I'll pass them along to my group members that were responsible for those sections. With regards to the Columbia University section and what his current research is focused on, we're in the process of trying to figure that out. There is no information available online with the exception of a few papers he wrote (in the publications area). We're actually waiting for an email back from his secretary right now. Thanks for your feedback!
~MeredithKochmd (talk) 22:50, 9 November 2011 (UTC)
Awesome! I'm looking forward to reading your final article. I'm also going to copy/paste my comments to the talk page on your actual article itself, I didn't realize that I was supposed to do this an not to the individual users. Thanks!
Pretkennedy (talk) 14:51, 10 November 2011 (UTC)pretkennedy
Welcome!
edit
Welcome to Wikipedia, Kochmd! Thank you for your contributions. I have been editing Wikipedia for quite some time, so if you have any questions feel free to leave me a message on my talk page. You can also check out Wikipedia:Questions or type {{helpme}} at the bottom of this page. Here are some pages that you might find helpful:
- Introduction
- The five pillars of Wikipedia
- How to edit a page
- Help pages
- How to write a great article
Also, when you post on talk pages you should sign your name using four tildes (~~~~); that will automatically produce your username and the date. I hope you enjoy editing here and being a Wikipedian!
Gerald Fischbach review
editHello Kochmd, I heard from your classmate Kierak33 that you have worked on the Gerald Fischbach article. I am about halfway finished with my GA review of the article and there are some changes that need to be made to pass it as a GA. You can read about the specifics on the review talk page. They are not urgent and can probably wait until after your final exams are over, but they need to be taken care of at some point. Good luck to you and your classmates! --Tea with toast (話) 05:02, 15 December 2011 (UTC)