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{{helpme}} Can you give me some feedback about the article I have written on "Steel Abrasives"? Another thing is how do we move the articles since it seems that I don't have "move" tab? Kzerrin (talk) 13:41, 6 November 2009 (UTC)Reply

About moving pages: Only confirmed and autoconfirmed users can move pages. You will become autoconfirmed user when you have done 10 edits and have been registered for 4 days. Seems like only few hours and you're there! Happy editing  Ilyushka88  talk  14:56, 6 November 2009 (UTC)Reply
Your article seems OK, but it needs a few more internal links, and you need inline citations. I tagged it for those things, you may remove the tags whenever the issues are fixed.--fetchcomms 15:14, 6 November 2009 (UTC)Reply

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Steel Abrasives

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(Also posted at Feedback, but copied here in case you don't check back there.)

This is a tough one.
First, I see someone has moved it for you, so if anyone else wants to supply feedback, it is here: Steel abrasives.
My first thought is that the "meat" of the article is fairly thin, so I wondered if it would better if it were part of a wider topic, such as Abrasives. I checked, and there is an article on the broader subject Abrasive. That article has problems itself—it was originally written in 2003 and 2004, when editors were less stringent about requiring references and inline citations.
However, I wonder if it wouldn't be better to use the material you have on steel abrasives to expand and improve the abrasives article. My guess is that isn't your first choice, but I don't see the article as adequate as it stands, so it either needs a fair amount of improvement, or it should be merged into abrasive.
I note that the abrasive article isn't exhaustive, I didn't see any mention of crushed walnut shells as an abrasive. I've used walnut shells to abrade aluminum parts.
The article needs references. I see you have added a list of references, but you need to tie specific statements in the article (e.g. 'The reason is that spherical shots are more resistant to the fracture which happens due to the striking impact") to a page of one of the references. See Wikipedia:Inline citation for more information. If you can tell me the name of the reference and page number, I can show you how to do one as an example.
Regarding the picture, we can help you do that. Please make sure than when the company says you can use the picture, they understand this means release it under a free license, not just release it for use on Wikipedia. See Wikipedia:Images for more information. See Wikipedia:Image copyright tags for acceptable licenses.
T:hat page can be a bit overwhelming; but if the company would accept a Creative Commons license, it would be best to upload on Wikimedia Commons. If we get that far, I can try to help, or find someone with more image experience.--SPhilbrickT 15:54, 6 November 2009 (UTC)Reply