User talk:Latriceetheresa/sandbox

Peer Review of Draft

You state, "During the summer of 1964, seven cities in the states of New York, New Jersey, Philadelphia and Illinois were the beginning of a pattern of rebellions that would last throughout the summer." Philadelphia is a city, not a state. You should consider revising this line. I also suggest that you add specific dates of riots that took place.Chynichart (talk) 20:39, 2 November 2017 (UTC)

Nia Dokes Peer Review

The topic is a very good topic I would be sure to add what was the reason for the assassination of Dr. King? and what were the solutions to stop the riots because of the assassination of Dr. King and how was the African American community affected by his assassination as well into your article. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Nia Dokes (talk • contribs) 21:38, 2 November 2017 (UTC)

Mychelle's Peer Review

The article indeed is very detailed and outline nicely. I suggest writing it out word-for-word to see it more clearly as a draft and not as in an outline. Your spelling and grammar are fine. I would personally give a little background on important figures to spike the audience attention and secondly explain why the figures were killed. You can also make a connection with your article to today's society. Ex: every time their's a black advancement, white people always find ways to degrade it. Though, make the situation neutral and not bias to one's feelings. (Mychelles (talk) 04:34, 3 November 2017 (UTC))