Leafcutter Ant
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editHello, Leafcutter Ant, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:59, 20 September 2021 (UTC)
Sarah Howes Peer Review
editOverall, I thought the article was well structured and organized. It kept a neutral tone throughout, balanced content well, and used a wide range of sources to back up content. I thought explaining the term, whether that be exploitative competition, asymmetric apparent competition, etc., then providing a real life example was a really good idea. I especially liked the real life example of apparent competition with the snowshoe hares in Newfoundland. I am unfamiliar with apparent competition and this example went a long way to helping me understand this new term. One thing that I would suggest to improve is your section under subheading “Apparent Competition in the Human Microbiome”. I had to read this paragraph a few times because it was worded a little weird. First, you say that the immune system is a generalist predator and then mention a predatory bacteriophage. Then, in the following sentence you mention “the one” I assume that refers to one of the two populations of bacteria and “shared predator” which I am not sure who this is in this context. Other than that, I think your sentences are clear and concise!
Will’s Peer Review
editAndreas, I am very impressed by how detailed and well-written this article about competition as a whole. If I were a student needing to study types of competition, this article you have crafted would be very helpful! What impresses me the most is how you provide a more-than sufficient viewpoint into all the different types of competition. I believe you have defined everything here in a clear way for me to understand. One change I would like to suggest (am I even qualified to do this in my position…) is that some parts of this article seem to get a little formal for a Wikipedia entry, such as in the Apparent section when talking about the differing species A, B, and C. I actually think the way you presented actually helps make it clearer for the majority, but some picky Wikipedia editors might not agree. In addition, I would love to hear a little more about the unusual connection between ravens and desert tortoises (I assume the former preys on the latter or something…). I think the most important thing you could do to improve this article is to make each section of this article potentially a little more structured, as they sometimes seem a little too unorganized for some. These are minor picky things though. The detail and organization is something I should try to implement in my writing. This is great writing in my opinion Andreas!