Leilachabane
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:40, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
Hi this is Austin, one of your peer reviewers, I'm pretty sure we were told to also tell you something on your talk page, so here is my feedback again. Lead:
- The lead is concise and written very closely.
- Ideally a box would appear that sorts out all your different sections (it did with mine automatically... I think it has to do with what font you use for headers.
- I would consider making the lead shorter, after all it needs to be a short intro for someone to get a quick understanding of this person.
Content:
- The content that is provided is relevant and up to date, there is no missing or extra content.
- The content also deals with Wikipedia's equity gaps.
Tone
- The tone is neutral and does not seem to favor any side
General
- This author seems to meet the notability requirements
- I would check to see if "queer" should be capitalized. I know there are discussions on capitalizing certain words like "Black", but I've never seen "queer" capitalized, and I'm wondering if the wikipedia people will flag that as an error.
- I may also be unaware of how this system works, but I believe the bibliography should be a separate link than sandbox but it was all in one right here? Anyways it was helpful because I got to see why you chose your sources and they were good but just make sure things are sorted out when you truly publish. Austinmcbride24 (talk) 22:10, 9 February 2022 (UTC)
Peer Review
editYour hook very clearly summarizes who Qureshi is, which is good, but it might be a bit long for a lead, maybe consider repurposing some of the information instead in the biography section. Your information is very well sourced, and everything has a link to explain where it comes from. Using the Daily Times and SF Chronicle shows that you have reliable sources. Another comment would be regarding the use of their name instead of their pronouns. It makes the sentences flow a bit less to use their last name instead of their pronouns, which is fine, but might be able to be avoided if you know their pronouns. You do quote some words in the Biography section without directly citing them, so I'm unsure if that would be an issue or not, it might be best to explain it in your own words. Overall great article so far! Navidasf (talk) 21:16, 16 February 2022 (UTC)