User talk:Lelder15/sandbox
Article Evaluation
editHi there!
This is a really great start on your article. I found it to be an interesting read. The main thing that I would recommend as you revise your article is to divide your information in to subsections. Based on what you have so far, you could create sections like origin, psychical appearance, context, etc. I also think it would be interesting to hear more analysis on the importance of the Casula like why it was made and why it is still considered worth studying by scholars today. Also I am curious to know where it is currently housed. Pictures would also add a great deal to this article as you describe the Casula so well! Well done! Claire203 (talk) 03:05, 29 November 2018 (UTC)
I read this article.
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Conservation-restoration_of_cultural_heritage?
The citations I clicked on all worked, and led to sites that gave more information. The article seems pretty unbiased, and there are a lot of links to scholarly journals.
The "Conservation Laboratories" section is pretty bare. I would like for there to be more information on how those technologies are used to conserve and learn about the extant art pieces.
The talk page is pretty comprehensive, and is what I would expect from what we learned about in class. People are talking about the changes they made, and asking about changes that didn't make sense to them. There is discussion about the best direction to take the page, so that it is distinctive from other wikipedia pages about similar subjects.
Lelder15 (talk) 01:13, 10 October 2018 (UTC)
From Prof. McClanan: Lauren, You’ve already gathered the core content, so you’re well on your way with this project. Overall the main challenge ahead is revise the content to fit the context for your work—Wikipedia. As you’ve probably noticed looking at other Wikipedia entries, the content is broken into subsections and topics that have their own separate entry get a link (expand from 2 you have already), so that’s a first step. Here are some more specific suggestions:
The abbreviation Sts is a little obscure for a general audience
At the beginning of the entry you refer to the subject in the plural, as in “They date…”. but later it’s in the singular, why?
“earliest form” at beginning a little unclear—maybe “earliest example”?
When you say they were attributed to the saints, do you mean as items that they once wore?
Proofread for mechanics and any missing/additional words, as in the sentence fragment, “They also used to be”
Also, you have so much terrific info, but it would be more engaging with one or two images. AMcClanan (talk) 18:47, 25 November 2018 (UTC)
Feedback from Prof McClanan, 12/7
editI see you added your content to the Herlindis entry, which makes sense. Overall the content is good, but it needed links to other Wikipedia entries so I added a few and I hope you'll consider continuing to do more links over time. Good work though otherwise!