Lexichristina6598

Nathalie du Pasquier's Wikipedia page is general and short. Being that there isn't much information about her within the first search of Google. Much of her information is found in interviews and exhibit sites. There are several scholarly articles within One Search about du Pasquier. Her “Early Life” doesn't include family or upbringing, which is an important part of an artist's life.

It says art is her “medium” but not how it became her medium. The journey of her career is vague , the page is written about her success but not the works behind it .

I added her style of work to get an idea of her pieces, due to pictures being copyrighted and unable to post. Her style of art also would give information on how she differs from other artists. Since the Memphis Group is the start of her career is it important to state how the group formed and how they worked collaboratively. Her solo-exhibition is a major role of her career, what is featured and why, give the exhibit greater detail. How she became the co-founder of the Memphis Group is in the first couple sentences but the transition to her solo career is not prominent.

Du Pasquier has traveled all over the world and has studied these places contributing to her art. The relationship between those cultures and her work is evident in my research.

Overall, her biography can be greater and much more detailed. Within my research it is important to leave out biased key words, such as labeling her work to be the best. Describing artwork can be difficult when avoiding owns opinion. Instead writing about her texture, tones and shapes are unbiased and visual. --Lexichristina6598 (talk) 22:45, 7 November 2019 (UTC)

Lexichristina6598 This is a solid workplan, with some detail. Please do the same with the annotated link list! Please see this fellow student's work for a good example. --Theredproject (talk) 03:33, 17 November 2019 (UTC)

Checking in

Lexichristina6598 Your annotated bibliography is incomplete, and it is really the key to getting you to the 1000 words added to the article? Feel free to email me if you have questions.

Next step is to peer review one of your classmate’s articles. Like your own, these will be on their sandbox pages. You should be able to see who is assigned each article on the Assigned Articles tab, so click on their username to find their sandbox. Remember, you had a training on this, which you can rely on. Feel free to email me if you have questions. --Theredproject (talk) 23:38, 1 December 2019 (UTC)

Feedback

Hi Lexichristina6598 I just checked and your edits and want to offer a few pieces of guidance that you will need to follow in order to have your edits successfully posted without being reverted.

• You need to add citations for every claim. For your purposes, you can think about this as pretty much one citation for every sentence. As we have discussed, you can reuse citations, but you have to have them there. At present, you have them on many, but not all of your claims
• You need to copyedit for grammar and clarity. Take these sentences, for example: "The most recent exhibit in Modena, Italy, includes seven of du Pasquier's sculptures. The site entitled "BRIC" was put on by ceramics brand Mutina’s headquarters in October, 2019. The site displayed colored and textured bricks showing her duality of art and architecture. The exhibit purpose is to be interpreted by the viewer. The collection was such a success that MUT created brick material on sale similar to du Pasquier's. The product Brac’ is available in five textures and can be used for the construct of walls and numerous projects."
  • The most recent exhibit -- maybe: Her most recent exhibit
  • The site entitled "BRIC" -- is BRIC the title of the exhibition? The gallery/museum where it was exhibited? The location?
  • The site displayed -- again, some confusion about your use of the work site. Do you mean exhibition? Or installation?
  • showing her duality of art and architecture -- what do you mean by this?
  • The exhibit purpose is to be interpreted by the viewer. -- can you be more specific? Isn't this true of all art?
  • The collection was such a success that MUT created brick material on sale similar to du Pasquier's. -- did they made the material because of the success of the show, or was it planned beforehand? Your sentence implies that they had not planned to offer the brick prior to the exhibition, which seems unlikely.
  • can be used for the construct of walls and numerous projects -- what do you mean by "numerous projects"--Theredproject (talk) 15:51, 15 December 2019 (UTC)