Lilaclydia
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:06, 24 September 2021 (UTC)
This article about April Soetarman is very engaging from the start to the finish. Going into multiple factors of April's life involving background, career projects, current work, and awards. Allows the reader to get a strong basic understanding of who this person is in a very easy and convenient way. The spelling and grammar are very strong for this article although if any changes were to be made I would think about one wording change in this part of a sentence, " signs to further explore different art avenues" and possibly changes "art" to "artistic". I believe with the context of this article it would seem more reasonable to have artistic and not art. Also with the format of this article, I would consider looking into changes and adding different subtitles before the information of your work. With your first points being under the subtitle "Lead" I feel like you could be more descriptive with "Background", "Early Life", or "Work" to help the reader get a better understanding of what they are about to read. Not only changing this first subtitle to something different. But, also possibly adding another title to help space ideas and facts out in a more organized way could be beneficial.
Reading into April Soetarman more I got to be curious about how she came up with some of the ideas of her work and projects she has done over the years. In the edit summary, there is an attached link that leads to a website called "How Side Projects Fuel Creative Living with April Soetarman". This article is an interview that talks about how she started her life in the artistic and designer field, the impact she is trying to make, and what she encountered along the way during her journey. This interview could be used as additional information to expand on what is already talked about in your Wikipedia article.
What I can incorporate into my Wikipedia article based on reading this article is going more in-depth into a project as you did with "The End of the Day". This can get the reader to feel more involved in what the person did with their work and get a stronger understanding of who they are. — Preceding unsigned comment added by TheRidler27 (talk • contribs) 17:38, 29 November 2021 (UTC)