User talk:LoquaciousNika/sandbox

Prof Garcia's Comments

A nice start, Renika, but this was insufficient for the assignment. I think you should have spent a lot more time thinking about what Cultural Transformation Theory is - you will probably not be spending much time talking about other countries or how cultures change. Instead, you will probably focus more on the works by Eisler and will just delineate his/her theories in their writings. You will also want to see what other academics use cultural transformation theory so you can write about that. Have you set up an appointment with Sarah Hammill yet? I think it would be good for you to do that. Also: you were supposed to come up with 5 sources. What happened!? Alfgarciamora (talk) 12:52, 6 October 2016 (UTC)

Peer Review

Hi Renika, I'm Megan and I picked your article to peer review. I think this is a really interesting topic that you could develop into something great. You have a few couple of sentences in my opinion and from those you could expand outwards. Also, remember to find more sources so you have information from a variety of places and you can write plenty on the subject. Start reading your sources and build the draft of the article. Megan Molina (talk) 02:27, 19 October 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for your input, Megan. I've since added a lot of information, especially expanding a few of my former sentences like you had suggested. You were right about how it would be easier to write if I found more sources. Turns out there's plenty more information on the subject than I first thought. LoquaciousNika (talk) 02:25, 7 December 2016 (UTC)

Cultural Transformation Theory Peer Review

Hi, I'm David from your sociology class and I chose your article "Cultural transformation theory" to review. I think this topic is really interesting and there are a lot of really great subsections that can be added to it. A big focus can be on the historical evolution of this system and at what points societies around the world started to differ from the original "partnership model." You can contrast the historical differences between these societies on a global scale, with some of them taking part in the "dominator model" more than others. You could also use the modern day as an example with certain locations in the middle-east being geared more towards a male-dominated society, while the west takes a more equal approach between genders. I like how you're trying to analyze the past to see what led to these changes in culture in the present day. Possible factors could be religion, the evolution of the economy, or how much contact that culture has had with the rest of the world to lead to such a change. Dalon041 (talk) 03:28, 19 October 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for taking the time to peer review my article, David. The idea of looking at it from a historical evolutionary point of view is exactly how I wanted to present this theory. In the future, I would like to add more cultural references from other parts of the world to emphasize that this was a global shift and not just isolated to one area. A present day subsection would also be really helpful since Eisler's main point of the theory was to show that going forward, it is possible to change our current societal model. Especially now seeing as how gender equality is a controversial topic currently. LoquaciousNika (talk) 02:25, 7 December 2016 (UTC)