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Nice work expanding the neural binding article. I fixed a few minor formatting issues, but I have a few concerns about your article.

• Much of the article lacks inline citations. For example, the entire Gestalt psychology section lacks citations. While it references quite a few studies, no citations are provided, only the names of the authors.

• Much of the article are written in a detailed, technical style. Articles should be accessible to readers whose background in biology is pretty basic - maybe high school or introductory undergraduate readers. That doesn't mean you have to dumb everything down, but you should try to explain things, and think about what the average reader might gain from this.

  In the Gestalt psychology section, spend a lot of time discussing the literature; generally speaking, this sort of thing doesn't belong in a Wikipedia article, and if it does it needs to be sourced to a secondary source that discusses some dispute or disagreement.

• The article appears to include original interpretations; for example, you wrote: If Chen came up with a better way to then consolidate these constellations then his idea would become for viable. If this is your own conclusion, then it doesn't belong here. If this is someone else's opinion of Chen's work, then it needs to be cited to them, and preferably, presented as their opinion (unless, of course, it's the generally accepted position, in which case it still needs a citation, but it should be presented as the mainstream view).

• The article could use more wikilinks. Wikilinks are valuable to readers, since they allow them to learn more about the topics discussed in an article. For example, most people won't know what some term means, they can click through and find out more. A lot of the people who read this article aren't going to know much about the topic. Adding links like these help integrate your article into the rest of Wikipedia, making it more useful to readers.

• You should only capitalize proper nouns.

• File:Orthonasal_vs._retronasal_olfaction.jpg isn't appropriate free content. Although it's available through the NIH's website, it says copyright Taylor & Francis Group and does not appear to be licensed under an appropriate free licence.

• While you uploaded File:Establishment of coherent reprensentational states by temporal binding.png as a free content, I'm unclear what the basis is for doing so. You say that the copyright holder has released all rights, but the journal Consciousness and Cognition has a copyright notice. If this was released by the copyright holders (presumably either the journal or the author who created the figure) you need to provide a link that establishes that.

It's important that you fix the tone and style of the article before you move it into mainspace, but it's even more important that you make sure that everything in the article is supported by inline citations. Thanks. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:36, 30 March 2015 (UTC)