User talk:Masonzhang98/sandbox
Good background information on the development of the game! You've got clear facts presented w/out bias or vagueness. The "release" section is especially thorough and clear. There are some minor grammatical errors. The former portion of the first paragraph is really well-cited, but the latter portion could use more sources. The first paragraph might also be split up into a few smaller paragraphs just for ease of reading. The rest of the article after that has plenty of sources. I think MORB can probably just be an in-text link since it's another wiki page? The information about the champions seems like it might be expanded and clarified more. Rmhargrove (talk) 19:14, 31 January 2017 (UTC)
Feedback on League of Legends draft
editI looked over the text that you included in your sandbox, but it looks like this is primarily existing text from the article. I'll wait to see your new updates/contributions. Please let me know if you have any questions or if I can help further. Thanks Tburress (talk) 00:09, 2 February 2017 (UTC)