User talk:Mattbowo/Adam Harvey (artist)

1. This article really describes Harvey’s goals and motivations for the work that he does. You can really tell that he is passionate about his work.

2. I think that the Career section could be organized a little better. Currently the flow isn’t very cohesive, and you jump around between different ideas within the same paragraph. Having a paragraph contain one central idea will make this flow better and read easier.

3. Just be aware of overuse of the same work in a paragraph, and be aware of possible run on sentences. Since people are referencing these articles a quick reads, you want it to flow as nicely as possible.

4. I haven’t yet included the image and short bio on my page, which I would like to do next. I think you did a lot of good research and have everything you need, nice job!

Awesome work on this! --ScientistBee (talk) 20:24, 8 April 2020 (UTC)