User talk:Miegodorales/sandbox

Rose's peer review

Strong draft overall, but you need to make your sentences more objective and neutral.

The following sentences give away how you feel about the topic: - "Unfortunately, not even the three percent..." - "This change in climate is jeopardizing..." - "less than one percent it should be of concern" - "causing global temperatures to rise at an alarming rate." - "Climate change begins this negative domino effect" - "As we try to combat this problem transportation of freshwater seems to only be making the matters worse"

The resources section has some duplicates. You can use the same citation multiple times and clean this up. You should add scientific studies and other non-governmental resources.

Including specific examples of water bodies affected by global warming would make this section stronger.

Rds.csus (talk) 21:03, 1 May 2019 (UTC)

thank you for the feedback, this is very helpful. --Miegodorales (talk) 02:27, 6 May 2019 (UTC)