User talk:Mitchunk13/sandbox
Latest comment: 8 years ago by Josefhoracek in topic The Lead
Sources
editYour sources and citations look great. Go ahead and add the citations to the article. Josef Horáček (talk) 02:12, 21 February 2016 (UTC)
- You can't quote directly from the sources. You must summarize or paraphrase. Josef Horáček (talk) 02:20, 14 March 2016 (UTC)
The Lead
editYour first paragraph is unnecessary. You don't need to describe the NCAA because there is a separate article for that. Instead, you should add an internal link your first mention of the NCAA. Also, the end of the first paragraph doesn't maintain a neutral point of view.
I suggest that you get rid of the first paragraph as well as the first sentence of the second paragraph. Then revise the next sentence to find an opening for your lead. The lead will be short, but that's okay - the article is short. Josef Horáček (talk) 13:26, 27 February 2016 (UTC)
- The revision is better. You should start with the third sentence and revise it to begin with "The NCAA adopted a drug testing program in 1986..." The continue with the second sentence. Delete the first sentence. The rest of the lead is fine. Once you revise, you should post it. Josef Horáček (talk) 23:48, 1 March 2016 (UTC)
- The lead isn't supposed to have a section header. I fixed it for you. Josef Horáček (talk) 02:23, 14 March 2016 (UTC)