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editThe article about Pho - a traditional Vietnamese food written on Wikipedia is quite complete and complete. Each author contributes very useful and positive information about the food as well as the knowledge of their own Pho. Pho article on Wikipedia full of essential elements and very clear about dishes such as introduction, origin, processing, history, development, distinguish between pho Saigon and pho Ha Cabinet. But today I will say a little about the presentation and arrangement of paragraphs, links from external sources, the parts lacking.
At first, I felt that the article on Pho on Wikipedia had very good and well-read information, but the structured not well, and was not scientific when the first word was an introduction to Pho. Then, I think it should be historical part, so we should summarize clearly the origin, country and duration of pho, then we will divide the small parts to talk about the birth. Pho comes from China, France or Vietnam,etc, because this is not exactly information because if you turn history of Vietnam, we all know was France, US and China have invaded for thousands of years, to know that pho comes from the study of the food of another country or the real of Vietnam, we should speak by expressing opinions, should not be too sure or believe that believe it is true as the article suggests, because the article has shown history then refers to development that is not linked to the origin of China or France, making it lose its consistency and make the reader will reading history again. Later, it maybe that part of the culture or customs of eating Vietnamese Pho, it may be important because now Pho has spread and is known around the world, so the introduction of the culture of eating Pho is important because it can give people a know how to eat. Next can be ingredients in Pho, processing and nutritional value in pho, Pho has been varied into many different types such as: Pho sour, Fried rice noodle, Vegetarian Pho, Roll Pho. Today, we value ourselves, or in other words is our body, as well as being educated about eat health, and Pho is really a very good taste: fatty, sweet, salty,etc. And nutrients: lots of protein and fiber. And then, we can talk about the development of Pho, and show how people in the world really loves Pho, and how Pho has grown to countries, especially a best developed country and have many different ethnics like the United States. Finally, we can mention the famous Pho restaurants and the layout of Pho and the table for eat Pho, can be concluded with a paragraph about the importance of Pho in the lifestyle of the Vietnamese.
The second, through reading and research, Pho article on Wikipedia are referenced from quite reliable sources such as: 1. Oxford "pho, n." Oxford English Dictionary (3rd ed.) Oxford University Press. March 2006. ", 2. The Guardian "Renton, Alex (May 16, 2004). "Good morning, Vietnam". The Observer. Guardian Media Group. Retrieved December 26, 2014. ", 3. The New York Times "Gross, Matt (5 May 2013). "Learning to Love 'the People's Food'. The New York Times. The New York Times Company. p. TR8. At lunch, for example, I'd often order the cheese Pho Hoa Pasteur. " But besides that, there are also lost or inaccessible information: 1. Thanh Thảo (19 August 2012). "From the bowl of pho 'unmanned'" [From a bowl of cheese, 'no pilot']. Thanh Nien (in Vietnamese). Vietnam United Youth League. Retrieved 19 May 2013. 2. Hoang Linh (March 5, 2009). "Ramblings about Pho". BBC Vietnamese (in Vietnamese). Retrieved May 16, 2013. 3. "A Bowl of Pho" Archived 2011-10-26 at the wayback Machine., San Francisco Chronicle, November 1997. And each source is different, no source is repeated too many times. This is the last post that was edited: • (cur | prev) 17:49, 5 April 2018 24.121.225.29 (talk). . (46,547 bytes) (+1). . (→ History) (undo)
And everyone is still contributing information about Pho. Actually, this is a neutral and detailed article, almost no grammar errors because Wikipedia is a site for people to get information, it is almost perfect, because people will contribute, and improve posts every day so that the article goes to the most accurate. The article is also quite stable on the sentences as well as make the reader easy to understand. In addition, the article has an image insertion to illustrate and highlight a particular name or key word and has an external source to help learn more when necessary. There are no complaints for this very good article, and in my opinion, you will complain more about people but the food is less.