User talk:Mwydl001/sandbox

Prof Garcia's Comments

You are all set, Megan! You will definitely want to expand on the triad literature, and Simmel is a great place to start. But also focus on the other sources that cite Simmel. An excellent job! Alfgarciamora (talk) 14:38, 6 October 2016 (UTC)

Week 6: WELL DONE! I am so happy with the work you have put into this project, Megan. I commend you for a job well done. =) Keep it up! You are well on your way to adding a substantial amount of useful information to the triad page. Alfgarciamora (talk) 13:01, 12 October 2016 (UTC)

@Mwydl001: Well done moving stuff to the mainspace, Megan! I like the progress you have made. As you start shaping your final draft, however, make sure to read through your page and edit it so that the content is more encyclopedic in style. You should not have sentences that start with "this paper says..." That is more for colloquial conversation than an encyclopedia. What is more, you have to do a little more leg work with expanding on your subsections. Network closure, for instance, is a really big topic that needs a bit more work. But overall you are doing great. I look forward to your final piece! Alfgarciamora (talk) 21:00, 4 November 2016 (UTC)

@Alfgarciamora: Thank you for your feedback professor. I still have so much more to fix and add to my article. I will definitely change what you had suggested. Mwydl001 (talk) 01:06, 9 November 2016 (UTC)