Nazartsar11
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 19:31, 28 September 2020 (UTC)
Review for "Saba Bank" page additions
editHi Nazartsar11 - good job editing the Wikipedia page on the Saba Bank! You've made some great improvements to this page. What follows is a review by an external reviewer who based their comments on the version of your page that's available at this link.
Reviewer comments:
editLead section:
edit- “Saba Bank in the Caribbean Netherlands is the largest submarine atoll in the Atlantic Ocean and has some of the richest diversity of marine life in the Caribbean Sea.”
- Commas around bold text is needed for appropriate sentence structure.
- “The reason behind why the National Park was established was to provide protection to the biodiversity of the bank.”
- Change this sentence to, “The National Park was established to provide protection to the biodiversity of the bank.” To make it more concise.
- “In the past the bank has been damage by anchors from ships and tankers settling for fueling up on oil.”
- Comma needed after “in the past”
- “settling for fueling up” is confusing. I would change to “…damage by anchors from ships and tankers while loading oil.”
- “After a while the Saba bank began to deteriorate in color and size.[1]”
- Please be specific with “after a while”. When did Saba Bank begin to deteriorate? Five years ago? 10 years ago? 50 years ago?
- ‘bank’ in Saba Bank should be capitalized.
Infobox:
edit- The information provided is the same as in the old page but is still useful and appropriate.
Body of the article:
editPolitics
- “About one third of the Saba Bank lies within the Saba territorial waters, 12-nautical-mile (22 km) zone.”
- An ‘a’ is needed before 12-nautical-mile
- A reference is needed for this section.
Gallery/Images:
editSame composite image provided as in old page, which is still relevant and appropriate.
References:
edit- “This article includes a list of general references, but it remains largely unverified because it lacks sufficient corresponding inline citations. Please help to improve this article by introducing more precise citations.”
- I agree with the suggestion by Wikipedia that more in text citations are needed. There are four references provided but only one appears to be linked within the text. I suggest the authors link all four references within the text where they are used.
I hope the above is helpful as you wrap up your edits on your Wikipedia page! If you have any questions about this review, please let me know and I'll help you contact the reviewer.
JoGDelta (talk) 06:11, 30 November 2020 (UTC)