User talk:Nedavall/sandbox

Latest comment: 8 years ago by Amille75

Nice work! I don't have any additional comments beyond the excellent suggestions below. --Amille75 (talk) 05:24, 7 December 2015 (UTC)Reply


Laura Silverstein's Peer Review I. General Comments: -I like how you have structured this information and I think you have good flow between topics. - I think you should describe what agronomic traits are in the second to last paragraph. - Maybe you should add a little bit more information to the second paragraph in order to fully cover that topic. II. Grammar: - After the first time you wrote the plant's name, maybe you should use the abbreviation. III. References: - It seems like you use your references well and use them all pretty equally.

Hey! My name is Soumya and I'm a student in your evolutionary biology class. I enjoyed reading your contribution and have some feedback for you.

A) My main takeaway from your contribution was that Digitaria exilis has high nutritional value to humans. I liked how you discussed ways to alter the crop so that it could be used for human consumption. It speaks to the evolutionary significance of the plant. I also liked how you indicated nitrogen as a catalyst for this plant's growth. As an improvement, you could expand on this and talk more about other ecological factors that maximize crop yield.

B) There were no noticeable grammar, spelling or punctuation errors. The scientific names are written correctly, but maybe you could abbreviate the name every other time you use it after the first.

C) There are 5 distinct citations. I liked how you grouped the citations even though you used each citation more than once. The citation formats also look correct.


Abby Schneller's Comments

You have good information but the sentences are choppy and would not only flow better but also make more sense if some of them were combined. Also, be a little more specific on the qualities that your plant has rather then making a general statement about the qualities that it and all of the other plants (corn, rice, etc.) also have. Focus more on its unique attributes, which you did a good job of providing examples of. The first paragraph about the nutritional content and where it is located is really good, interesting, and agriculturally applicable. The paragraph about soil conditions in West Africa is interesting, but a little difficult to understand. Maybe go through and re-word it, and then talk more about what the results of the research actually mean.