User talk:Nicolasfernandez1/sandbox

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Rgoldfarbterry

Hi Nicolas! I think that your introduction is good, but you don't need a heading for it. It can just go as a paragraph at the top of the page. I don't think you need the section heading "sexual effects of prostitution" because they could also be considered physical effects. Overall, I think your article may be a little biased because it lists all the negative effects of prostitution without a lot of other info. Something that I did that hopefully made it a little more balanced is give a more detailed picture of the laws in place and the history of prostitution in the country. If you can find that info, I think that would round out your article nicely! Mlfisher (talk) 15:51, 10 April 2017 (UTC)Reply



I think your topic is really interesting and well organized. It seems to cover a wide range of topics within the overall theme of prostitution in Honduras. I also really like the section that focuses on its global impact. In your sex trafficking section you say that: “Some children actively participate in the child prostitution industry because of the possibility to go to better countries such as the United States.” I think you might want to be careful of saying that the United States is a “better” country than Honduras; this statement puts disparate values on the two countries. Maybe a better way to frame it might be that some children choose to participate (etc. etc.) because it seems to provide opportunities for migration to the US. In addition, I think it could be interesting to expand upon section about the effects of sex work on children. Maybe finding some more statistics or information on how it affects children’s lives and health could help you to do that. Expanding the introduction to this section could also give a bit more history to the article. Why has curbing prostitution been unsuccessful? What were the laws at different points in time that were placed on the table and who were the stakeholders in these different efforts? Great article and can't wait to see the end result!

Rgoldfarbterry (talk) 20:10, 10 April 2017 (UTC)Reply