Hi Nicholas,

I liked your article on the Topsfield Fair. I appreciate your use of lists and figures, and find the article to be well resourced from a variety of good sources. I am interested to see what information you acquire from the history book you have ordered, and think that with the addition of that information the article will be very strong! I will definitely be adapting your use of lists and figures for my own article.

Nice work,

Skcatalina (talk)


-Intro to Topsfield Fair has a few grammatical mistakes, just re-read it. Ex: "the the"

-try not to use heavy adjectives like "grown massively" or "humble roots" because it can sound biased at times

-history

-fix dates in the Topsfield County Fair top right template

-dollar sign before number

-plural of bus in Parking

SebastianEuraque (talk)

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