Oliviaohearn

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:45, 27 March 2019 (UTC)

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Hi! So far this looks good, however there are specific things to keep in mind. The first is to make sure to avoid vague terms when it comes to time, such as recent and begun. This is because the term recent is relative and will quickly become dated as time goes by. It's better to be more specific and say things like "since 2016..". With the term begun in the lead sentence, I'd actually change this to "have taken notice of" since that removes the time term. You also want to make sure that you avoid casual writing. I don't see huge issues with that, but it's always good to be cautious.

I hope this helps! Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 13:54, 9 April 2019 (UTC)