User talk:Ordoneznx/sandbox
All of this looks good, except for the few typos, but you aren't citing any information. How do you know this?
Feedback & Suggestions
edit((From my Peer Review section in My Sandbox))
· What's Good:
> Sources - Great and reliable Resources; I used similar in my draft which is good because my topic on collectivist culture is significantly related to yours
> Structure - Adding the two topics to the article was a good choice; adding examples was a nice touch
> Neutrality - Word choice and sentence structure was informative and neutral
· What to Work On:
> Structure - Proof-read your sentences; you missed a few articles, like "depending on the culture a person is brought up in...," and some punctuation, such as "Using this approach , a person..."
> Balancing- You touch almost equally between collectivism and individualism; I suggest to link to the collectivist page instead of explaining yourself so that readers are able to read further into that specific topic. The focus of your article should solely be on individualist culture. — Preceding unsigned comment added by RMM72 (talk • contribs) 00:35, 18 April 2017 (UTC)