User talk:Orgullomoore/rationale supporting title of 2020 Venezuelan Operation Gideon
Latest comment: 1 year ago by SandyGeorgia in topic Paras ?
Paras ?
editOrgullomoore this is a fine analysis, highlighting aspects that hadn't occurred to me. Might I entice you to add some paragraph breaks to make for easier reading? When others unfamiliar with the topic come to read the argument, the absence of para breaks leaves a feeling of having to read an exhausting wall of text. Bst regards, SandyGeorgia (Talk) 00:09, 4 October 2023 (UTC)
- You're too late, cuz I already did! I'm also in the process of making some other modifications, hopefully for the better. I'll remain open to considering any additional feedback you might have.--Orgullomoore (talk) 00:17, 4 October 2023 (UTC)
- It's very good ... but I think the Mark Denman, brother of Luke, a weak example, as he is "involved" ... to improve readability (that is, make your analysis shorter), I think you can ditch that one, and it might be more effective to move the BBC example before the Miami Herald ones, as it is a very strong example for the point you make. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 00:23, 4 October 2023 (UTC)
- It might also be more effective to move your concluding sentences (beginning with "the policy laid out at Wikipedia:Article titles ... ") to the first sentence, as you may not have readers' attention still by the final sentence. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 00:25, 4 October 2023 (UTC)
Operation Red Dog is the one mentioned at this lawfare article. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 01:08, 4 October 2023 (UTC)