Patel4r5

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 19:46, 12 September 2018 (UTC)

Hi Richa, I have drafts on my sandbox and is ready to post to the article. Would you please help to take a look and let me know if you have any additional thoughts or recommendations? Thanks and appreciate your time!

Jessica Jessicaatwiki (talk) 18:09, 13 November 2018 (UTC)

Feedback

The topic you're interested in counts as a medical topic on Wikipedia, so you need to make sure that you're using sources that follow the sourcing guidelines for medical content. For the most part, you should be relying on recent systematic review articles. The only source you're using that comes close is the CDC, and even that isn't ideal.

You're writing an encyclopedia article, and it's important to get the tone right. Just stick to the facts. For example, in your opening paragraph

When a mother drinks alcohol, so does the developing fetus.¹ Consumption of alcohol during pregnancy can lead to its penetration via placenta and umbilical cord and affect the growth of baby. As babies are small and in developing stage,¹ alcohol metabolizes much more² slowly and therefore³ remains for longer time in their bodies when compared to their mothers¹

1. You can omit these words without losing any real information.
2. Saying "much more" isn't sufficiently specific. If you want to say something, say how much - use actual numbers
3. You should avoid "therefore" because this implies that you're drawing a conclusion for your readers. Wikipedia articles don't do this - they aren't mean to convince the reader, just inform them.

You should avoid bullet points except for actual lists. Use sentences and paragraphs. Bullet points are useful reminder in situations where everyone knows what you're talking about, or in a talk, where you'll go into more detail. They aren't very helpful when the reader doesn't know more. Paragraphs are much easier to read, and are more informative. If you do use them, you need to make sure that each one has its own supporting citation.

You also need to make sure that you link terms that the average reader might want to learn more about. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 21:58, 16 November 2018 (UTC)