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Hello

Hi,

• I'm bobrayner, and I'd like to help out with your course. If you have any questions, just ask...
• Please bear in mind that creating a new article can be a lot harder for new editors, compared to just improving an existing article.
• What's the schedule - when does work start? Do you have a list of students/accounts?
• I've tweaked the formatting of this page - hopefully it now looks a bit more like what you intended. Sorry - text formatting on wikipedia (bullets, lists, indents, etc.) can be a bit clunky and counterintuitive sometimes.

Have fun; bobrayner (talk) 16:22, 24 September 2012 (UTC)

Hi - are you still around? Any more detail of schedule (and of students) would be helpful. (Please don't feel that I'm nagging you; if the course only starts a few weeks from now then there's no rush). If you need a hand with anything, just shout... bobrayner (talk) 01:29, 1 October 2012 (UTC)

Hi,

It looks like quite a lot of students have set up accounts now, but I think there are two (Keosha Perris & Taya Eberle) who haven't set up accounts yet. Or if they have accounts, they haven't edited somewhere obvious so I don't know what their accountnames are. Could you check? Once the students page is complete, it will be very helpful. In the meantime I've sent a welcome message to everyone else and am watching their pages. bobrayner (talk) 14:01, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

Hello

Hi Penny,

Mitkrow here. It says we are supposed to write on the other students pages but there are currently no links so I figured I would shoot you a message instead. I'm glad it seems we have some support from bobrayner. Looking forward to this tough but interesting project.Mitkrow (talk) 02:15, 18 October 2012 (UTC)

Hi. I think there are other student pages you can add comments to now. Give it a try. Penny Powers (talk) 22:50, 22 October 2012 (UTC)

Where to work

Hi,
There are lots of places where we could work on a new article(s), but I think the two best options are:

• Everybody works in separate sandbox;
• Everybody uses one sandbox (ie. yours).

The first one is best if everybody is working on different articles; the second is best if work is more collaborative, on one or two articles. What do you think? Feel free to use the course page for discussions &c too. There are already some existing articles which overlap a bit - it's fine to dive straight in and improve those (or maybe take a piece of a general article and use it as the nucleus of a new, more specialised article). bobrayner (talk) 23:08, 22 October 2012 (UTC)

I see what you mean with these two options. I think the best would be if people try uploading stuff to their own sandbox to see if they can fiddle with the formatting, links and references, and then when they think they have a draft, they can upload it to a sandbox related to this course page. Then we can talk about it and refine it until we're set to go "public". How do we get a sandbox for our course? Penny Powers (talk) 22:27, 29 October 2012 (UTC)

OK; that sounds good. I'll make a "centralised" sandbox for the course.

By the way, this is great - citation templates, headings, categories &c all in one go! (but It's OK to build things in smaller steps in a sandbox - a lot of editors do it that way). bobrayner (talk) 15:47, 30 October 2012 (UTC)

Bob, I'm having some second thoughts on this and not sleeping at night. Our last class is on November 30 and students have to present what they've written. Writing this article is only part of what they have to do in the class. I'm not sure I structured this class very well. I haven't made short assignments in learning wikipedia along the way, and so students are not doing anything, thinking they can do it all at the end. The formatting is going to be a huge learning curve and students are going to panic at the end. The class is on Fridays and students are beginning to take the quiz on the chapters in the textbook, and then leave because I have no tests in the class, no final exam, so they don't want to be here to listen to the guest speakers I have lined up. What do you think of changing the assignment from writing an article to adding to an existing article? There is an article called "The Effects of Climate Change on Humans" and it's not very good and hasn't been updated since 2011. Could each student pair upload their work to that article? Would it all get deleted immediately? I've got to back off here or everyone's going to fail the class. Penny Powers (talk) 18:14, 30 October 2012 (UTC)

I'm sorry you are finding this so stressful, Penny. I think you should feel free to make whatever changes feel good to you as an instructor. For what it's worth, the basic outline of a structure that is on your Sandbox page looks pretty good. I think students could work away within a structure like that if you were OK with that.

As for working with the existing article, I would defer to Bob if he felt differently... but my guess is having students "upload" work into an existing article, or working within that structure may actually be more daunting to the students. My suggestion at this point is to have students author their sections in their own Sandboxes, and when I come visit on November 16th we can talk about the process of merging them into an article. I wrote Robin and Amanda again this afternoon and hopefully I will be able to speak with them before Friday. BrLamb (talk) 23:07, 30 October 2012 (UTC)

OK.

• I think we got off to a slow start; but that should be fixable, to an extent.
• I would strongly support a shift towards improving existing content, because writing a new article has a steep learning curve and it's rather "all or nothing". With an existing article, somebody else already got it over that hurdle so you can just concentrate on collaboration and content and sources (and the fiddly formatting stuff is already done)
• I understand that starting with your own clean sheet of paper may be less daunting to some people who are worried about trampling over somebody else's work, but trust me on this one - starting an article from scratch is deceptively hard if you haven't done it before, and it's more likely to be deleted. Expanding and improving and fixing other people's work is business as usual for wikipedia - if students are fixing an article's problems, it's very unlikely to be deleted.
• Effects of climate change on humans looks like a good place to work. Somebody has already put warning tags at the top of the article, which highlight the kind of work that is most needed. If you'd rather draft some improvements in sandboxes and experiment a bit, then take the changes into a live article, that's fine; but you can work directly on the article too.
• Please don't stress too much. Also, bear in mind that I'm a geek and I'm online very often, so feel free to encourage questions at the the course page (or on students own talkpages - I watch those too) in case they have any questions or bright new ideas during the rest of the week. You might only be in the classroom at a certain time on a certain day, but wikipedia is being edited 24/7.
• Also: Some of the editing so far has been quite cautious. If you or students make any mistakes on an existing page, it really is easily fixed. So, feel free to push a little harder and take risks & experiment with changes to a page. At worst, somebody will click "undo"! bobrayner (talk) 23:44, 30 October 2012 (UTC)

Thanks for the input, guys. I was afraid that doing a brand new article might be a problem as it would be so much new for the students to learn. I like the idea of uploading their work to an existing article. I'm going to go and delete what I did in my sandbox. Bob, don't bother creating a sandbox for our class. I think I should monitor the students' own sandboxes as they try uploading stuff they've written. Then when all three of us (me, Brian and Bob) think they can put it into the existing article, we'll go for it. I was very worried about changing an existing article, but you've allayed those fears for now. Plus, I went and did a grammatical change to that existing article this morning and the world did not end. Nothing bad happend and it wasn't deleted, either. OK, so my plan now is for our two campus ambassadors to take some time in class this Friday and coach the students up to speed. I've applied for a computer lab for one hour during the three hour class. I don't know if they can find me one, but if they do, then every student can be staring at a screen as Robin and Amanda go from station to station and make darn sure that every single one of them has a proper account, user page, talk page and sandbox. Then they will get every student to upload something, make a link, do a reference, and do some headings. All this before we go home. I will insist on it. You may be a geek, Bob, but I'm a control freak and I feel like this course is getting out of my control and I don't like it. This is my plan to get it back under control. Thanks. Penny Powers (talk) 00:02, 31 October 2012 (UTC)

-- Fantastic feedback Bob, thanks so much. We're lucky tp have you with us. And Penny, I only wish I could be there this Friday, but I think your plan is a good approach. BrLamb (talk) 03:41, 31 October 2012 (UTC)

Sounds like a good plan to get the situation back under control. What time will you be working on Friday, and what timezone are you in? I'll try to be online then, so you can get answers/inputs straight away instead of waiting til the next week... bobrayner (talk) 10:58, 31 October 2012 (UTC)

My class is Friday 12:30 pm to 3:30 pm Pacific time. I got an email this morning saying they have found a computer lab for me to use from 1:30 pm to 2:20 pm, so I'll go and email Amanda and Robin and tell them what I want them to do during that time. I couldn't make it longer because we have a guest speaker at 2:30 pm. The time we have will be totally packed and I'm not sure there will be time for me to get any answers from you, Bob, but I'll sit at one of the computers and have my talk page open just in case. It's only 50 minutes! I see this afternoon that some of the students still do not have a user page and/or talk page created even after I reminded them yesterday. I sure have a lot of things I will change for next year's class. I saw one student called this whole assignment a "gong show." I need to get them to help me fix this. Penny Powers (talk) 19:10, 31 October 2012 (UTC)

OK. I was supposed to spend tomorrow evening in the gym but this work is probably higher priority. :-) Also, bear in mind that wikipedia is a bit old-fashioned in this respect: You don't get alerted to updates in real-time like on Facebook; if you want to see any very recent changes you have to refresh/reopen the page - or if somebody adds a comment to your talkpage whilst you're browsing, the next page that you open will have that orange bar across the top to notify you. So, "real time" collaboration isn't very slick. bobrayner (talk) 10:02, 1 November 2012 (UTC)

thanks for putting the banner at the top of the existing article. And thanks for the advice to push the students a bit on editing. I will do that.

Secondly, how do the students get their name in parentheses after their account name on our course page? A few of them have it and the others don't. Instead of them signing a list to tell me what their account name is, I'd like to see their name on the course page. How do they do that? Penny Powers (talk) 19:44, 1 November 2012 (UTC)

Bob, did I see that you blocked someone from undoing my changes to "Effects of Climate Change on Humans" ? Penny Powers (talk) 16:28, 2 November 2012 (UTC)

Hmm, that's strange - there's nothing in the article history. However, I do get involved in a lot of other editing problems elsewhere... don't worry about it. bobrayner (talk) 20:13, 2 November 2012 (UTC)

Well, Bob, we had a good session and the students have made lots of progress. I now have them all with accounts, user pages, talk pages, and sandboxes. I showed them the article we're going to revise, and some of them put up something. We went over linking and referencing. We have scheduled another session for anyone with problems. I feel a lot better about our ability to actually edit an existing article now. I didn't need to ask you any questions during our class today, but I'm going to continue to edit the existing article and monitor the students' edits. I know I'll have more questions! Penny Powers (talk) 22:47, 2 November 2012 (UTC)

That's really good progress! bobrayner (talk) 09:56, 3 November 2012 (UTC)

Beware of duplicating other pages

Hi

I disagree with Bobs restoration of your draft article and harbor doubt that he understood why I reverted. However I do not really care to pursue the matter. As you go forward please be aware that there is a murky line between

(A) Elaborating in a lower level article (like this) after a summary paragraph in a higher level article (like Effects of global warming or the even higher level Global warming) and

(B) Doing so much duplication of other coverage that at best your work becomes so redundant it is creating a maintenence headache and so is not an improvement to the project overall; or at worst you open yourself - right or wrong - to the perception by others you are creating a WP:POVFORK.

I reverted the partially complete work you posted LIVE for two reasons. First because it appeared you were free falling into B above. Second because as I tried to explain on the article talk page Wikipedia:An unfinished house is a real problem. When Bob reverted he said we do not need two articles. That mystifies me because I never suggested there be two articles. You should work on your house in your sandbox (or a draft page under one of the groups user or talk pages which amounts to the same thing) and only enter that work on the article when it is readable. Empty section headings make a mess of an article that no one will take seriously if they stop by when it is in that condition.

Oh one more thing.... seemed like many of the section headings were likely to stray beyond the impact on humans. I do not quite know what the scope of this article is supposed to be. Since the planet is a system arguably whatever we say about global warmings effects in some way or other effects humans. So there is a fundamental organization of article scope to deal with before really launching ahead. Users on other related pages will likely be happy to help figure out the best places to cover the various subjects you want to add to this page.... and so you could avoid (B) above with prior planning.

Cheers and beware of looking like you are doing a WP:POVFORK NewsAndEventsGuy (talk) 19:16, 3 November 2012 (UTC)

NewsAndEventsGuy: You do make some good points, and I think there were some problems with the content, which I plan to work on (and will give some more pointers to students). However, if my "we only need one article, not two" comment baffled you, I'd invite you to look at the article history: The page expanded from 30k to 37k in the last couple of days, then your "revert" added another 30k, then my revert took it back down to 37k. We are all fallible, not just the students and newcomers. You and I are fallible too. ;-)

Penny: Yes, there were some good and bad points. I'll put some more time into feedback & suggestions over the next couple of days, although User:Vsmith has already done some good work tidying up some of the loose ends in the article. bobrayner (talk) 20:38, 3 November 2012 (UTC)

Dope slap! Indeed I thought I restored older text in place of the new but now see that I appended the two together which of course was not my intent. Thanks for catching that. NewsAndEventsGuy (talk) 00:07, 4 November 2012 (UTC)

OK, I'm lost again and don't know what I'm doing. Students are beginning to upload their work and yes, it's sloppy and not formatted correctly. I can't help them because I don't know how. Yes, it's happening in the main space and not in a sandbox. But there's a banner up top telling anyone who cares to look that this is under construction by a bunch of students and their know-nothing professor. Surely they would cut us some slack here. Penny Powers (talk) 20:45, 5 November 2012 (UTC)

I have not looked at it but it appears there is a designed-for-you training resource you could tap for assistanceNewsAndEventsGuy (talk) 20:55, 5 November 2012 (UTC)

And other help options NewsAndEventsGuy (talk) 00:32, 6 November 2012 (UTC)

Bob, I've inserted the new introduction to this article. I have learned how to link to internal Wikipedia articles, and how to link to external web pages. Tomorrow I will learn how to create references and a reference list. I have no idea where the students are in uploading their work. They have 3 weeks left and I'm nervous. Penny Powers (talk) 22:24, 8 November 2012 (UTC)

More feedback

Hi,
The top part of an article, the "lede", should just be a summary of the rest of the article. The lede of Effects of climate change on humans is now getting quite long. It might be a good idea to move some details down into the body of the article - which section do you think is best? bobrayner (talk) 19:56, 9 November 2012 (UTC)

Yes, it's long. I thought of it as background info for the reason we have to consider these effects seriously. I've got mostly 2012 references (even one from today!) so maybe we can remove the banner at the top about it being out of date? As to where this information should go, I have no idea. Do you have an idea? I'm about ready to go to class now and find out how to do references and a reference list. My campus ambassadors will teach me. I'll reply again when I get back, but that won't be for another three hours. Penny Powers (talk) 20:00, 9 November 2012 (UTC)

This is where those extra section headings might come in handy. Sections aren't set in stone; if lots more content is built about subtopic X or Y, maybe we need an X or Y section.

It would probably be good to remove the out-of-date tag. I'll look through the article again and check there's nothing else out-of-date... bobrayner (talk) 20:05, 9 November 2012 (UTC)

OK, today I learned how to do references. Wahoo! I got them all done in the introduction. See what you think, Bob. I also think you can remove the out-of-date tag *AND* the original research tag. I'm not sure it's too long, but tell me what you think. I'll be back in my office on Monday. Penny Powers (talk) 23:26, 9 November 2012 (UTC)

This is fabulous. Well done!

NewsAndEventsGuy has put a lot of suggestions into the introduction. I'll fix all of these on Monday, so stay tuned. Penny Powers (talk) 00:03, 10 November 2012 (UTC)

I only reviewed the 1st paragraph; please double check all your work for the same sort of POV/editorializing issues. Thanks. Also.... abrupt climate change means suddenly jumping to a new equilibrium which may or may not be nice for humans but does not threaten all life; dangerous climate change is a subject where subjective policy considerations creep in and are decidedly all about what is dangerous to us; runaway climate change is loosely used by some but I and a few other editors here try to stick to the meaning Venus Syndrome.... where all our H2O goes into space and the planet is left too dry for life. So I cleaned up those links. NewsAndEventsGuy (talk) 00:12, 10 November 2012 (UTC)

Departing

Hi; I will continue to watch the article talk page and will no longer be stalking your user page. If you wish to be certain any user sees an edit or comment about the article or organizing efforts to work on it then I would encourage you to put it on the article or the articles talk page and then just post a DIFF link at the users talk page. Like this for example . Cheers NewsAndEventsGuy (talk) 05:45, 10 November 2012 (UTC)

OK, I've done some preliminary editing and shortening. It's better, but it's not finished. I'll do some more tomorrow. I also put a note to that effect on the talk page of the article. My students continue to add their pieces to the article. Penny Powers (talk) 01:37, 13 November 2012 (UTC)

More editing and shortening. Bob? NewsAndEventsGuy? Is this enough or do I need to do more? Students are still uploading their work.Penny Powers (talk) 22:22, 13 November 2012 (UTC)

November 2012

Hello, I'm Guðsþegn. I wanted to let you know that I undid one or more of your recent contributions to Effects of climate change on humans because it didn't appear constructive. If you think I made a mistake, or if you have any questions, you can leave me a message on my talk page. Guðsþegn (talk) 21:25, 14 November 2012 (UTC)

We won't work there anymore. I have the students' work in my sandbox now. Penny Powers (talk) 21:34, 14 November 2012 (UTC)

Newsandeventsguy: Please put the page "Effects of Climate Change on Humans" back to the way it was in September and remove the banner at the top for my course at my university. We're working on my sandbox. Penny Powers (talk) 21:46, 14 November 2012 (UTC)

I restored the article; about the talk page banner I left a note on the talk page itself. Welcome to wikipedia - and I mean that sincerely! NewsAndEventsGuy (talk) 22:42, 14 November 2012 (UTC)

Catching up

Hi,
How's it going? Do you need a hand with anything? bobrayner (talk) 00:41, 23 November 2012 (UTC)

Hi,

I'm just dropping in to say that a lot of the students' work in sandboxes is very impressive; paragraph after paragraph of readable, neatly-referenced text. Really good stuff. Keep an eye out for synthesis and original research though.

What are your plans / next steps? bobrayner (talk) 23:28, 28 November 2012 (UTC)

Hi Bob. Tomorrow is our last class day and the students are presenting their work to the rest of the class. Then it will be up to them to decide what they want to do with their work on this. They may want to try to insert it into an existing article or do nothing at all. I will leave it up to them. Penny Powers (talk) 18:19, 29 November 2012 (UTC)