User talk:Psychnut93/sandbox

Peer Review

Hello Psychnut,

First of all the amount of work you have put in is impressive. I think that most of the sections are pretty well established with plenty of evidence.

I think that a strong lead in explaining youth disability and some common forms/causes would be a great improvement. You could possibly add a separate section listing some of the causes of common chronic disability. I also think it might be helpful to distinguish from types of disabilities like physical, emotional, or psychiatric.

Also, I think the presentation would be cleaner and fuller if you could break up some of your sections into subheadings. I realize that most of the information in those sections is pretty reliant on itself but maybe you could add in some additional information. For example you could possibly break down a section like crime by including Characteristics and Behaviors, Statistics, Impact, Aid and Resources or some similar type headings.

Another section like Finances could be divided into Costs, Quality of Care, State Assistance etc. One other thing, in this section I feel the question posed of "do they do stay at home and care for their child or go to work?” boarders on being non-nuetral. Though this is only my feeling and opinion when reading it

Again, this is great work and you have a very strong article so far. All my feedback is meant to be constructive and you can take it with a grain of salt. I am no expert. Thanks for your dedicated work. Good Job. Djansen15 (talk) 02:54, 10 November 2014 (UTC)