User talk:Rshrid/Racial Disparities in the COVID-19 pandemic in the United States/Draft

Peer Review Comments

I think that these revisions did a very good job of expanding the information present within the original article! A lot of new information was added that helped give the subject further context especially in a larger picture of the health obstacles of the black American population. Readers will surely have a greater understanding of how the Covid-19 pandemic just contributed to an already extensive list of issues that black people in the US face when it comes to healthcare and health outcomes. I would suggest that some additions be made when it comes to other racial/ethnic groups and how they were impacted by the pandemic and I know that the impact to Asian Americans was one area that you wanted to add more information to and I think that would help a lot. This would help the article to match up to the broadness of subject that the title of the article suggests and give readers are more big picture understanding of the topic. I think this is among the most important thing that you could do to further improve the article as well as watching out for readability elements and making sure that most people can pretty reasonably understand your writing. Ijwilliams (talk) 18:53, 2 November 2021 (UTC)

Peer Review

I think the article is really good at maintaining neutrality. Each point is supported through evidence and the tone is never argumentative. Also, the lead was very good at clearly defining the topic. In addition to this, I think the organization of the section was mostly done well. In regards to changes, adding more content on xenophobic and racist attitudes is important. Otherwise, I feel as though the section seems awkward and unnecessary. Also, adding images is important as well. This would allow the article to be more visually appealing. However, I think the most essential improvement would be adding other races to the article to fully encompass the topic.Ferviani (talk) 02:07, 4 November 2021 (UTC)