Scandrettew
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editHello, Scandrettew, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 19:24, 10 June 2019 (UTC)
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editHi! I looked over your draft and had the following notes:
- With headers you only have to capitalize the first word unless it's a title or name. The capitalization rule applies in the article content, as you don't need to capitalize ethnocentrism or a person's field or job.
- Be careful with sourcing - one of the sources came up as saying just ""LINCCWeb Catalog Search". www.linccweb.org. Retrieved 2019-07-21.". I was able to fix this since the link to the source itself was in the URL given, but this is pretty much a rarity when it comes to school catalog databases that require one to sign in.
- I saw that you merged some sections together as well as removed content from the original article. Be cautious when it comes to removing material. You want to make sure that the content doesn't end up too jumbled or that something was removed that should have stayed. What I'm more specifically wanting you to do is leave a note on the article's talk page when you move stuff over, explaining why you removed content, in case someone contests the changes.
- Make sure that you attribute claims and assertions to the person making the claims. You've mostly done this, but just review the content carefully.
- The section on origin and development claims that one person created or popularized the term, then states that another person did. I think that this is basically the following : both individuals have been credited by people as creating the term. Gumplowicz is the one that scholars believe created the term, although others say that it was in use prior to him and he only popularized it for his time period. Despite this, the term still stayed relatively obscure. Sumner came up with a new definition that became very popular, so many see him as the creator of the term but Bizumic says that he only popularized it via his writings.
- If this is the case, this needs to be clarified. If this is accurate, you could add something along the lines of "The term did not receive widespread attention until the 20th century, when American social scientist William G. Sumner proposed two different definitions in his 1906 book Folkways." This would help clarify why Sumner has been seen as the creator.
Overall this isn't bad, most of this is more just making sure to clarify and attribute, as well as making it fit Wikipedia's style and formatting type. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:43, 22 July 2019 (UTC)