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Latest comment: 4 years ago by SerChevalerie in topic Comments on the Aftermath section

Comments on the Aftermath section

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Hi SerChevalerie, sorry for the delay in offering comments on your draft. The only substantive comment I have is that the first few paragraphs seem to be taken from some version of the lead. They are completely different in style from the rest. It would be best to rewrite them in your own words and at a sufficient level of detail for the body. Cheers, Kautilya3 (talk) 20:17, 3 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

Kautilya3, thank you. Do help me out with sources for the same, as the current sources only talk about fragments of the incidents. I have still done my best to expand upon them. Additionally, please offer your further comments on the discussion at Talk:2020 Delhi riots § Relief camps in "Aftermath" section so as to close it. SerChevalerie (talk) 08:16, 4 April 2020 (UTC)Reply