Sheimanj
Bioenergetics Review
editHey! Chris here! I just wrote a review for your article, hope it's helpful! Happy editing!
- Definitely need more citations
- Heterotrophs and autotrophs are mentioned twice in the overview, once in the second paragraph then again in the forth. It makes the whole thing sound kind of repetatitve and incohesive. Maybe clean that up a bit.
- I really like a lot of what you're saying in your sandbox! I also think you're totally right in saying that there needs to be a larger disscusion of the three laws of thermodynamics
- I also totally agree with what you were saying about cotransport, it seems odd that it's just kind of thrown in there ( maybe Crane just popped it in themselves when feeling insecure), but, it would be cool to give a shout out to more specific processes in bioenergetics (maybe like ketosis or gluconeogenesis)
- It might even be a good idea to to give the larger topics in bioenergetics (like cellular respiration and photosynthesis) their own little sections that provide really general overviews
- Also, this may be excessive but it might be good to mention the page Bioenergetic Analysis in an attempt to acheive "Balenced coverage" (although it totally makes sense if you don't b/c it's described as "body psychotherapy" and sounds a bit ridiculous)
- Also in terms of organization maybe give this video a watch (this guy got me though AP biology)
RogerHaverstein (talk) 05:40, 14 April 2017 (UTC)
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 08:19, 4 March 2017 (UTC)
- Hi Ian, thanks for reaching out! I have a quick question about inserting an image onto my sandbox. (This image is already on wikipedia, so is there a way I need to cite this?) For some reason I'm not able to insert any image:( Any tips? Thanks so much! Sheimanj (talk) 04:33, 9 March 2017 (UTC)
BIOENERGETICS
edit(To whoever is grading this)-- Please review the bioenergetics page, and look at the history to see what changes I've made! I ended up editing it little by little on wiki proper, so not in my sandbox. Oh well, at least I think it's justified bc that page needed some work!! Sheimanj (talk) 20:32, 11 May 2017 (UTC)