Shoba98
Joined 3 July 2023
Latest comment: 1 year ago by Shoba98 in topic Lead section
Lead section
editHi Shoba, you should add an "A" article before "Particle receiver", so the first sentence will be "A particle receiver is a...". Also, instead of repeating that it is a "receiver", you should explain what a receiver is: the lead section should be easy to understand even for people who are not into the topic. Jaqen (talk) 08:27, 5 July 2023 (UTC)
- Thank you for the feedback Shoba98 (talk) 08:41, 5 July 2023 (UTC)
- @Jaqen Hi Jaqen, I implemented the corrections that you mentioned. Also I think that I am very close to finishing the whole page, please let me know if you have any additional feedback. Thanks! Shoba98 (talk) 13:23, 5 July 2023 (UTC)