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Sholeh's Peer Review

Sholeh's peer review

You have a strong lead, which is clear and informative. Instead of using in-text citations, I believe we are to use footnote like citing.

Sholeh Salimi (talk) 01:35, 31 October 2017 (UTC)RESPONSE:

Thank you for your feedback. Agreed; the citation style presented is inaccurate and will be changed as needed. Sholeh Salimi (talk) 01:35, 31 October 2017 (UTC)

Sholeh & Casey's Peer Review - From Katie & Marissa

Excellent draft! The information flowed easily and in a way that makes sense. Your lead sentences are very strong. When adding to your draft, it may be helpful to expand more on why maintaining attachment to a perpetrator may serve the victim. Specifically, a layperson who does not know much about attachment in psychology may benefit from more information regarding how the victim may benefit from maintaining a relationship with a perpetrator who betrayed them. Additionally, expanding upon institutional betrayal would be really interesting. Also, it would be helpful to know more about how BTT influences PTSD and DID outcomes (again, thinking of a layperson reading this). Overall, it's clear that you guys have a great outline to work with in moving forward and expanding on your draft, particularly with child sexual abuse and institutional BTT. Looking forward to learning more about BTT in your final draft. Good job, guys!

Sholeh Salimi (talk) 01:48, 2 November 2017 (UTC)Thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful contributions. We agree that incorporating attachment as its own section will assist the reader in understanding BTT and the "betrayal blindness" which often results from such trauma. The suggestion to expand upon institutional betrayal is a wonderful idea. There is an extensive body of research that is focused on institutional betrayal and we believe it would benefit the reader to explore the relation between institutional betrayal and BTT as there is quite a bit of nuance within the theory. Lastly, the feedback to include more information about the influence of BTT on PTSD and DID will be incredibly helpful in tying the theory together. Thanks again!Sholeh Salimi (talk) 01:48, 2 November 2017 (UTC)