SunnyLexi
Joined 16 March 2017
Latest comment: 7 years ago by Dmvasconcelos in topic Peer-Review
Peer-Review
editBy: Dmvasconcelos (talk) 16:23, 6 April 2017 (UTC) and Vladams (talk) 16:25, 6 April 2017 (UTC)
Introduction
edit- The examples with the links to their Wikipedia pages are great to help further explain how crop diversity can threaten global food security.
- The last paragraph is a great lead-in for the rest of the article, however you shouldn’t use ‘therefore’ because it is not an analysis-based article. Also, add a sentence or two at the end about the international organizations because you say one sentence and then end the intro.
- We would suggest adding some more information or rewording the part about the two components. It can be hard to understand at first, we had to read it a few times.
- Also, add citations and reference numbers to the facts in this introduction.