Peer Assessments:
My feedback can be found using the following links -
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User_talk:Elesaturner/sandbox
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User_talk:Joeo030103/sandbox
Response to My Peer Assessment:
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User_talk:Pollyjoke
1. Which comments will you address and how do you plan to do so?
I will aim to address all of the comments I have received from my peer assessment as they are definitely valid and I believe if implemented, will improve my article. Firstly, I do understand that I have not cited my references throughout my article - this is something I prefer to do at the end of writing my articles however, I will make sure to do this before final submission. I also understand that the amount of references given are rather limited. The small number of sources that I have used thus far were very helpful and provided a lot of information but I acknowledge that more sources should be used in order to elevate this piece. Therefore, I will continue my research in order to find more sources which are applicable to my topic of choice and will deepen my existing article.
I also agree that it will be beneficial to add another example of a problem within South Africa's Education system and EE's solution to fix it. Due to word limit restrictions this was difficult to do so for the draft article but as the word limit has been lifted, I believe it will be valuable to add another example, especially for the reader as it will deepen their understanding of EE's impact on education.
Although I will add more information on the inequalities that have led to certain South Africans having access to a poorer education than others, I believe it is important to remain focused on what the key issues are and how EE have helped / not helped to solve those issues. This is because the article is more so focused on the influence EE have on improving poor education rather than the origins of poor education in South Africa. However, I do believe that briefly summarizing such details will be useful in widening the readers knowledge on South Africa's education system.
2. Which comments will you not address and why?
As previously stated I believe all comments are valid and can be used to elevate my draft article however, the last comment may be most difficult to implement. Although I agree that more imagery could be used to give the reader a better image of the topic, copyright restrictions have made it difficult to find quality images that are also relevant to the topic of discussion. The range of images that are available of the work EE has done is very limited which also makes it difficult to address this comment however, if I am able to access quality images that can be utilized within this article I will definitely do so.