User talk:Tingflorance/sandbox

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I'm an online ambassador for your WMST 250: Women, Art, and Culture (2014 Q3) class and have just stopped by to provide a quick review and add what I hope will be helpful comments.

You've done some great work on this article. You provide good background and career information and a nice list of her major works. It is generally written in an encyclopedic tone, often has citations, and the citations are created in the correct format.

Some suggestions are:

• Perhaps editing this to be a little less redundant: "She typically does not photograph strangers or people on the streets but rather friends, family, and a lot of children. She is more interested in capturing people around her that she knows and herself, as well.[1] She has also taken architecture photography and fashion photography. Her films often include a cast of family members, friends, colleagues, and sometimes male strangers." -- Maybe something like: Most of Kubelka's photographs and films are made of friends, family members, colleagues and children. She also had taken self-portraits and architecture and fashion photography.
• If you want to add an image, you should be able to add one "fair use" image.
• You may also want to add a Further reading section. See World Cat options.
• Was she really born in London? Just wondering since her childhood was spent in Vienna and East Berlin - before moving to London.

I'll check in on you again, and I'll be watching this page if you have any questions or comments.--CaroleHenson (talk) 01:36, 1 November 2014 (UTC)

• You may want to take a look at Janise Yntema for a sense of what an introduction or lede would look like. Wikipedia articles start with a "lead" section, which is a short summary of everything in the article. For some articles this summary can be a few paragraphs. Others (like Yntema's article and probably this one) can be a few sentences long.--CaroleHenson (talk) 03:50, 4 November 2014 (UTC)