User talk:Tonylopez3/sandbox
Peer Editor, Ryunosuke Iwatsubo
I believe that your articles are really affective and factual. The details and data about goods movements, waterways for transportation, cost for goods traveling and its maintenance, and act or organization for reduction of pollution in the Mississippi River are really reliable and consistent of your topic, Mississippi River System. However, I believe for this assignment, it is supposed to be only made by primary sources, but not your own data or graphs. In my opinion, it is good to have your own graph, but I want to see it completed before it is published. Adding to it, your citations are needed to be fixed. I believe you cite sources with numbers and make reference list below your sandbox.
Response to commentator Ryu - 5/7/18 Hello Ryu, thank you so much for your valuable feedback. I too agree that providing more facts and data about actual goods movement along the river instead of focusing on the geography will play a vital role in enhancing my stub. I understand your stance on my approach of using a graph. However, im not the one providing the information, I will be referencing the National Park Service, they provide statistical information on the upbound and downbound commodities. So my idea was to create a pie chart, using their facts, to express the facts in a clearer way.
tonylopez3 — Preceding unsigned comment added by 2620:DF:8000:5784:0:2:5E4B:91E9 (talk) 04:58, 8 May 2018 (UTC)