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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:21, 11 February 2020 (UTC)

Definitions of aging

Thanks for your additions to the aging article, but there are some issues with your addition that need to be fixed. I removed your addition from the article, but it's still in your sandbox where you can make the fixes before adding it again.

Your layout isn't quite in keeping with the standard layout for Wikipedia articles. Check out pages 7-9 of the Editing Wikipedia brochure (that I've linked to here) for more tips on layout.

• Your section is called Definitions of Aging. Section headers use sentence capitalization, not title capitalization, so it should have been "Definitions of aging", except that section headers shouldn't repeat the article title, so it should just be "Definitions".

“Demographic Measurements of Aging” refers to the passage of time (chronological), biological processes of deterioration.

References

• “Demographic Measurements of Aging” - here again, you use title capitalization; it should have been Demographic measurements of aging, with the first word capitalized only because it was at the strt of a sentence. Don't use quotes unless it's an actual quotation, and if you use quotes use straight quotes, not curly quotes (in keeping with Wikipedia's style guide).
• “Demographic Measurements of Aging” refers to the passage of time (chronological), biological processes of deterioration. - This isn't actually a complete sentence. It's also at odds with the definition used in the lead section of the article. The entire article should feel like a coherent whole.
• The source you used, senesence.info, is a personal website. You should be using peer-reviewed academic sources, preferably recent review articles that synthesize the current literature.

It is a collection of phenotypic changes that make human beings more likely to die; age-related increase in likelihood of mortality after reaching maturation.

• Here again, you aren't writing in complete sentences. You also need to make sure that what you say meshes with the rest of the article. This is a definition section for the whole article, after all. These problems exist throughout this paragraph - when you redo this, make sure you're using normal prose that's accessible to the average reader.

See also: Gompertz Function; mortality rate doubling time (MRDT). Initial Mortality Rate (IMR); independent of chronological aging.

• Wikipedia articles aren't written like this. If a section gives an overview of a topic, but there's a more detailed article elsewhere you can add a note at the top of the section, but you wouldn't just add an interjection in the middle like this.

Generic Definition of Aging: “progressive deterioration of physiological function, an intrinsic age-related process of loss of viability and increase in vulnerability.”

• You need to attribute things (this is a generic definition according to who?). And if you use quotes, you need to make sure that the precise wording of the quotes is important. If it's just information (as this appears to be), re-write it in your own words.

This continues throughout the section - you have brief, note-style definitions, when what you want it readable prose.

Your citations aren't formatted properly. Try using a DOI to generate the citations. Finally, when you use the same citation more than once, make sure that reuse the same citation. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 13:31, 14 April 2020 (UTC)