Hi Vxwei, the first thing I noticed, is that there's unnecessary information in the introduction paragraph. Such as; "As creator of mankind, she molded the upper-class individually by hand with yellow clay, and as she grew tired, she instead used a string to pull up the clay faster and form the lower-class.[1] In the Huainanzi, there is described a great battle between deities that broke the pillars supporting Heaven and caused great devastation. There was great flooding, and Heaven had collapsed. Nüwa was the one who patched the holes in Heaven with five colored stones, and she used the legs of a tortoise to mend the pillars.[1]"
I suggest maybe adding that section to another part of the page, since the introductory paragraph should be a quick summary of the entire page, and not point out specific details. Perhaps you could add it to the "Description" Section, it'll allow your page to flow a bit more smoothly, and you can add more information on it, if you need to. CaiNdres (talk) 05:27, 15 April 2019 (UTC)
Continued peer editing: I like how under the "Appearances in Literature" section, there's a lot of more in depth detail, about the part that Nuwa plays(but only in some subsections, add more detail/information about what Nuwa does under each subsection, it is, after all, a page about Nuwa), and a quick summary of the story gives a lot of background into the assumptions that yourself and other authors make.
Overall, I like your page so far, just a few organizational mishaps. To me, the grammar is well done, and the basic formatting is pretty good. I also like the pictures, they're a good touch. Good luck on your project!CaiNdres (talk) 06:06, 15 April 2019 (UTC)
- CaiNdres thanks for your review and your suggestions. Vxwei I think the suggestion for your lead section is good: try to condense and be more succinct, and leave the details for the main body. You've done an excellent job reorganizing the page already, which is no small feat. I saw the discussion about the merger on the talk page, which is really awesome - thanks for taking that initiative and if you decide to go ahead with that, you'll definitely have your work cut out for you. I'm very impressed, keep up the great work! Gardneca (talk) 18:08, 18 April 2019 (UTC)