User talk:Warbeard/sandbox

Jones_Ash_P3

Major Points: The author expands upon the Wikipedia page Revelle factor. The introduction could benefit from writing out what pCO2, DIC, DIC stand for as well as keeping the links that were in the original paragraph. The Revelle factor equation could also benefit from being presented in equation format. Although I am unsure as to whether Wikipedia offers this feature. The author’s edits to The Revelle Effect section increase clarity and readability.

Minor Points: The Contents section should be in its own box with links to each section. The links to other articles that were in the original article should be kept in the new edits and new links made. New citations should be added and used throughout the article. The image is a nice touch but could use a comment and source underneath. In the section Thermodynamics ‘acceptation’ should be ‘exception’. Hollisrenee3 (talk) 17:14, 18 November 2015 (UTC)

Major Points

I would define DIC as dissolved inorganic carbon at the first mention instead of only at the equation for the first time. I don't know if there is a way to make the equation a little more visually friendly but it is a little confusing in the current format. Citations should be throughout the page. Figure included is informative and appropriate. The first sentence of the second to last section should better define anthropogenic

Minor Points

Contents should be before information on page. The author might want to consider splitting the first sentence in the Thermodynamics section into two distinct sentences. In the phrase "dependent on the systems alkalinity," systems should be system's. "Bellow" should be "below." There is extra spaces in front of "mid-pH waters." Remove "Where as" at the beginning of the sentence. The author could name the second to last section just Anthropogenic CO2 since the page is on revelle effect. There is a typo in "North Pacifichas."